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Commentary Language Production 1: 'That Legendary Night' My language production 1 is connected to my Language analysis as it is aimed at the same audience, Liverpool Fans, but it is still accessible to all football fans. My first piece That Legendary Night is the overview of 2005 Champions League final from a Liverpool fans point of view. As a fan I am reliving the game in the article as well as showing the emotional side to it. It is crafted for publication in a specialist Liverpool magazine to be printed in May, which is when last years Champions League final occurred. The piece is written in the form of a football article explaining what happened during the match. Liverpool fans would be ideal readers as most Liverpool fans would be able to relate to the article, but the article is also accessible to football fans in general. Looking at the graphology the article is set out in simple columns and pictures have been placed in the article to show what it is about. The main title "25.5.05 That Legendary Night" written in a large font is to emphasise the importance of the date it self, which will never be forgotten. "That Legendary Night" is used to show how it is remembered by millions of fans. The use of the Liverpool Badge gives it ownership to Liverpool. ...read more.


My target audience will be able to relate to this as they would've reacted in the same way. Adjectives are also used like 'distraught' and 'dejected' to have an effect on the style of writing by extending vocabulary and making it read better. In the article I change from 1st person explaining how I felt and a narrative of the game, so that the audience could relate to it. The rhetorical questions help to make it more personal as Liverpool fans would have been asking the same questions. This makes it more effective and relates to the reader bring the reader in to the article. I use short sentences, with a lot of commas to slow that pace of the article down. This way the reader can think about what he is reading. I have also used similes to make it accessible for football fans in general. "You'll Never Walk Alone is one of those things opposing fans, especially in Europe, feel a great need to experience. It is like those who paid to hear Sinatra, in his prime, singing My Way." This helps football fans understand who haven't been to Anfield, how great You'll Never Walk Alone is seen. The language in my piece is both formal and informal. ...read more.


Tension is created in the story line through the use of hidden information. This use of withholding information and short sentences adds tension. The vocabulary in this story has not been restricted in any way as I am writing for teens. I did not feel the need to use highly sophisticated language and did not want to complicate the reading as I wanted to ensure the reader's comprehension. As the vocabulary used can be easily understood by teens, I have made my lexical choice appealing to the targeted audience. I used a mixture of simple and compound sentences in order to make it easier for my target audience to read. Sentences are kept fairly short and simple, to states the point clearly and effectively and also reflecting the type of reader it is aimed at. The structure of the sentences helped me build up tension slowly, and effects use in certain sentences added a sense of mystery to the story. "...the house, creeping through the walls, up the broken staircase, and into a very small room at the north corner of the house." The story is dark and humorous to appeal more towards teens and to make it more interesting and entertaining. The story is simple to relate to the audience. However it is written in such a way so that to make it attract a wider audience. English Language Mohammed Imran Daji ...read more.

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