The Funeral

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The Funeral

"The funeral was very painful. The whole town showed up. The man whose car had collided with the Powers family was in prison. They claimed his blood alcohol level had been at .29 from drinking all day at the local tavern and watching the football game. The deafening pain had followed for weeks. The woman had been unable to leave the house; it protected her and shielded her from the town's sympathy. Now, she was all alone. She had had to sell the home because she could not afford to keep it maintained by herself. Every Last shred of Lacey was gone except this cold hard stone in the middle of the other rocks. She lay down around it as she did every night and drifted off to sleep."

The main character was deeply affected by the loss of her younger sister. She seemed to have a fear of being alone and is, now that her sister is dead and her house had to be sold. The idea of someone having the fear of being alone is common, but I liked how she wrote the story and had the main character so deeply connected spiritually and emotionally, creating a strong familiar bond many of us can relate too.
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The story is character-driven but come across as being "flat" due to the same state of feeling throughout. I could tell from the motions of the old woman in the first paragraph that these memories of her sister were not going to lead to a happy ending.

The setting was well developed due to a good sense of scenery but needed a stronger character development. This led to the difficulty in picturing your characters in these places. I could see the lake vividly in my mind, but because the characters were not described more I could ...

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