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Creative Writing - A love so true.

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English Creative Writing A love so true I had never seen her so depressed. Tears were running down her face as I walked towards her. I would have given my life to stop these tears in her eyes but there was nothing I could do. Nothing can console a person who has lost a loved one. She probably did not know it then, but she meant the whole world to me. I wanted to talk to her and gather her in my arms and tell her that I loved her and that she had me for the rest of her life, even if her mother had left her. ...read more.


When I arrived, her father was glad to see me. He led me in and pointed to her room. I went in and saw Jane sitting in the corner of her room; staring vacantly into space. I managed a weak smile and sat beside her. She looked at me and tears sprang into her eyes. I took out my handkerchief and gave it to her. She accepted it and wiped her tears dry. " Let's go out," I said. She shook her head. " I think you should. Being alone at home is not going to help you overcome your grief," I said gently. ...read more.


Her father put his arms around my shoulder when I went into the hall. He heard everything that I said but did not mention anything. His arms around my shoulder probably meant that he approved of me. I shook his hands and later left the apartment. Then I walked to the lift and pressed the lift button. Within me I was trembling, half with embarrassment and half with anger. Also, deep within, I felt emptiness. Anyway I was glad that after worshipping her for four years, I had finally told her. At that moment, I heard a voice shouting "John!" I turned around and saw Jane running towards me. She threw herself into my arms and held on to me tightly. I hugged her. I could never describe the overwhelming happiness when she finally said the words "I love you, John". ...read more.

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