• Join over 1.2 million students every month
  • Accelerate your learning by 29%
  • Unlimited access from just £6.99 per month

Describe a local park

Page
  1. 1
    1
  2. 2
    2
  • Essay length: 822 words
  • Submitted: 21/12/2008
  • Marked by teacher: (?) Jean Wright
Share this essay:
Do not show me this again

Are you in the right place?

Jump to English Language and see how teachers think you should prepare in:

GCSE Writing to Inform, Explain and Describe

Teacher essay summary

3 star(s)

This piece clearly identifies with the purpose - to describe a particular setting. A range of ideas are communicated through each of the five senses, mainly sight - the others are touched upon so could have been expanded further.
The tone is persuasive and not too formal, as befits the purpose.
Slight repetition of points of interest, but clearly structured via paragraphs which focus on different aspects of the setting.
Several language features are used for effect, all of which are carefully selected to engage the reader.
An awareness of the audience is evident. Structural features include direct address and some speech.
Skills include a variety of sentence length, strengthened by a range of - mainly - accurately placed punctuation markers.
Despite some repetition of weaker adverbs and adjectives the vocabulary is varied, and the spelling of each word is accurate.

Marked by teacher Jean Wright 08/05/2013

The first 200 words of this essay...

Describe a local park

"Ronaldo!!" shouted Rooney. "Go tackle Sam". Teenagers were running on the grassy land, kicking the ball all over the place, trying to be a professional footballer.

Everywhere it was green. Which means no pollution. A boy got tripped over on to the

grass. It was calm and peaceful everywhere, no violence could be hunted around. Near the far end of the park, away from the football ground, was a beautiful garden for children to play. Swings, slides, play horses etc. were there. On the swings, a newly built boy was swinging really high and got tripped over and started crying because he got injured badly. Thus, his mother picked him up and first aided him.

When you walk pass the tennis court, you can hear people saying "I challenge you for a match". This is what usually happens in my local park.

This was the brief description about my local park. However, there is more. It is summer, the sun is happy and is shining all over the place. People come out and play football, cricket etc. Old people come out as the weather is welcoming them and they jog

Read more
The above preview is unformatted text

Found what you're looking for?

  • Start learning 29% faster today
  • Over 150,000 essays available
  • Just £6.99 a month

  • "
    I have used the site to find relevant essay questions for my senior students in Modern History to complete. As well as provided some essay samples to demonstrate the stucture of an historical essay.
    "
    Yvette Agars. Senior History Teacher. Saint John's College. Whyalla S.A.
  • "
    Markedbyteachers.com is the most informative, easy to navigate site that I have used, acquiring a wealth of information to assist with my degree.
    "
    Natalie. Criminology, Politics, Psychology and Economics. University Student.

MbT essay summary

This piece clearly identifies with the purpose - to describe a particular setting. A range of ideas are communicated through each of the five senses, mainly sight - the others are touched upon so could have been expanded further.
The tone is persuasive and not too formal, as befits the purpose.
Slight repetition of points of interest, but clearly structured via paragraphs which focus on different aspects of the setting.
Several language features are used for effect, all of which are carefully selected to engage the reader.
An awareness of the audience is evident. Structural features include direct address and some speech.
Skills include a variety of sentence length, strengthened by a range of - mainly - accurately placed punctuation markers.
Despite some repetition of weaker adverbs and adjectives the vocabulary is varied, and the spelling of each word is accurate.

Marked by teacher Jean Wright 08/05/2013

Marked by a teacher

This essay has been marked by one of our great teachers. You can read the full teachers notes when you download the essay.

Peer reviewed

This essay has been reviewed by one of our specialist student essay reviewing squad. Read the full review on the essay page.

Peer reviewed

This essay has been reviewed by one of our specialist student essay reviewing squad. Read the full review under the essay preview on this page.

Do not show me this again

Are you in the right place?

Jump to English Language and see how teachers think you should prepare in: