She also wonders why her "heart unchained?" This could show the freedom because the hurricane showed her that French Guyana is not that far away from England for an event like a hurricane to happen. It could also mean that she was a slave but has now been set free to live a normal life. In addition, Nichols personifies the storm by calling it her "sweeping, back-home cousin"; this shows that understands the storm and sees it as a usual event when she is at home, this shows that her memories from being back home have come back to comfort her.
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"In conclusion, despite the fact that both extracts are popular and high quality, I prefer Billy Cart Hill (by Clive James) to Remembering Aunt Marie (by Grace Nichols.) I like Billy Cart Hill because I feel more drawn towards his style of writing; I think this is because he uses a larger range of language skills such as similes, metaphors and hyperboles, while Remembering Aunt Marie uses straightforward language skills which are still enjoyable but not as exciting.
My preference is also due to the narrative structure and content of the two extracts, - Billy Cart Hill goes almost straight into the main story whereas Remembering Aunt Marie takes a long time to set the scene very descriptively. Also, I think James has chosen to talk about an exciting subject, which I would rather read about, because although I can relate easily to Remembering Aunt Marie, I do not think she has chosen a very interesting topic to talk about.
However, Billy Cart Hill does have some flaws, one of them being, that because he describes the poppies so carefully from the first paragraph, you know what's going to happen - the poppies get destroyed!"
"It is made clear that Grace Nichols is constantly in search for a sense of cultural identity through her poetry as she uses ambiguity and constant comparison of the UK and Caribbean to make the Caribbean lifestyle sound much more attractive, this is why I have come to a conclusion that she feels more comfortable in the Caribbean, this is made clear through her poetry as she is always giving us negative imagery of the UK and positive of the Caribbean.
Sadia Rahman Mrs Wynne"
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