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Friendship And Kinship If someone asks me who is the most important person in my life, my answer will be: my family members and friends

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Friendship And Kinship If someone asks me who is the most important person in my life, my answer will be: my family members and friends, because these two relationship have ever made me happy and taken care of me. In my mind, friendship involves recognition or familiarity with another's personality. Everyone has lots of friends around the world. Even though some people might think that the friendship and kinship are similar, I think there are some difference. We have an opportunity to choose someone to be a friend; however, we cannot choose family members. We can choose our friends who are loyal, cordial, friendly, or kind, who have a similar personality, who can share our lives, thoughts, feelings, and frustrations to each other. ...read more.

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However, we like to talk to our friends, because they can understand us and we have common opinions. When we talk to our relatives, we have limited topics. In general, we would like to talk about learning, job, events of the world, weather or some family events. We have to be careful with our words when we speak, to make sure every word is polite. In contrast to kinship, we have unlimited topics with our friends. Usually, we prefer to talk about our interesting things, love, life, movies, music and so on. Furthermore, we make a lot of joke to each other, we do not need to think too much about words using. ...read more.

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Especially, when we betray or do bad things for our friends. It is hard to renew a friendship. Relatives can really help us when we have some problems. They are usually older than us and have lots of experience. They can give us good suggestions. However, most of our friends do not have enough experience. Nevertheless, my friends just tried to make me happy and sometimes it's enough. In conclusion, some people might think that kinship and friendship resemble closely, yet there are still some dissimilar aspect. Actually, the kinship is valuable for giving good advice and understanding of our mistake, but friends are important for making us happy and having common with us. Therefore, even though the friendship and kinship are different, these two relationship are important and necessary for everyone. ...read more.

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Writing to explain can often be the hardest part of this section of the English Language syllabus, because to explain requires a fundamental understanding of something so fundamental we often take it for granted. This candidate has tried to answer ...

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Writing to explain can often be the hardest part of this section of the English Language syllabus, because to explain requires a fundamental understanding of something so fundamental we often take it for granted. This candidate has tried to answer why family and friends are mutually important but makes the explanation as to why and on what grounds/in what circumstance, etc. To some extent, there is an effective explanation but frequently the answer is not a clear definition between friendship and kinship. Some age-old argument are made and elaborated upon, but not to any great extent that suggests the candidate has considered anything other than their own situation. When writing to explain, advise or argue, their must be an appreciation of another person's perspective/point of view - for instance, someone who has no family/friends or does not speak to their family/has a divided family. This answer appears very blue skies-ish and assumes normalcy in every family, but this narrow approach limits the number of marks they can achieve for each point they make.

Level of analysis

The Level of Explanation is average. There is a good use of some discourse markers throughout th essay to show that some structural planning has been considered, and there is a wide range of vocabulary (i.e. it is not recycled - candidates must avoid recycling vocabulary unless it is for a certain effect, like repetition, as it shows limited knowledge of words). Either intentionally or unintentionally, this candidate has constantly referred to the audience as "We" and this mode of address allows for an instant connection with the audience so marks were won here.
Where there is room for improvement, however, is where the explanation of friends becomes very superficial. There is every chance we can fall out with friends just as we can with family, and vice versa: some family members may be better companions than any friend. To achieve high marks this candidate must consider this, or at least one other, point of view, to show a balance and realisation of a different perspective.

Quality of writing

The Quality of Written Communication is acceptable. There is only a small range of sentence structures used (primarily simple sentences as opposed to complex and compound), but there is a wide range of vocabulary showing their is a good understanding of how to vary language to fortify any piece of writing. However, the punctuation could be improved with a greater variety of punctuation points (semi-colon, colons) to show confidence in writing, and also, a proof-read will iron out any grammatical errors that occur, so to make sure the answer reads as flowingly and accurately as possible.


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