Gcse Original Writing

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English - Original writing coursework

Opening to a story

Genre: war and politics

Audience: teenagers/adults

Coarse, rocky terrain carpeted the concrete of which I laid upon. The tenebrous weather governed the clouds which suffocated the light from the moon thus blackening the atmosphere. Several sycamore trees stood firm in front of me, parallel from each other guarding the menacing ambience. It felt like a ghost town there were no buildings, no shops, and no life. I lay there shivering due to the outcome of the post war bloodshed, violently dumped on these streets. As I looked to the side I saw a straight road governed by an endless amount of white lines which ended at a complex, encompassed by several figures. A cacophony of instruments produced an assaulting raid on my eardrums, screeching sirens shot from oscillations of blood red light. My struggle to get up was pointless due to the lack of energy flowing through my body but instead I stumbled forward, continuing to seek refuge. The evening sky erupted with globules of liquid. The tangible substance showered bullets, drowning out my cry for help. I opened my mouth and slowly extended my tongue, catching the trickles of rainfall that dripped onto the tip. I was a young guy and before all this hate and war I had an untarnished face and was in fairly good shape. However, now my tranquil complexion was overshadowed and replaced by a pale white face, my almond-shaped eyes looked weary and tired, embedded with deep dark lines due to the lack of sleep. My hand was filthy and seemed as if I wore black gloves. Staring at the piece of glass on the floor, most probably from the vehicle my squad patrolled in, I ran my fingers down my face… my face was so lifeless it wouldn’t reflect. The uniform of which I was dressed in was spoilt with a composition of blood, sweat and tears. Nerves in my body began to fail, my hands, moved frantically back and forth as did my lips. What I became was hideous, my newly formed facial hair was scruffy and my hair was no longer neat, short or jet-black. More so, it was long, untidy and a mixture of slate grey and coffee brown.

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The endeavour became a constant struggle for me; gravity dragged me to the ground, resultantly leaving me crawling hopelessly on the floor. The rain struck harder, producing a damp atmosphere, and creating an asphyxiating stench that clung to the back of my throat like a smoker’s mucus. Using my bare hands, I clawed forward using every ounce of energy I had, my fragile legs sprawled out in every direction in desperate hopes to urge myself forward. In the distance the tattered grey building seemed as if it was abating and as if the grimy path lengthened to far reaching extents. ...

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