GCSE Travel Writing The door of the aeroplane opened and we stepped into the humid night air, complimented by a cool Mediterranean breeze

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Travel Writing: Malta

        The door of the aeroplane opened and we stepped into the humid night air, complimented by a cool Mediterranean breeze. This was the perfect conclusion to a memorable journey, of which, imprinted in my mind, there are images I can never forget: like flying over the Alps at sunset.

        The little tram that was patiently waiting for the passengers, shone like a little beacon, creating a warm yellow glow that flooded the runway. We filed onto it, or rather; we packed onto it like cattle into a hold, with each person’s space so limited they struggled to stand; everywhere you looked, you could see complete strangers helping each other to keep their balance.

        Looking back at this memory, although these gestures made me confused at the time, the actions that were made by the people around me almost represented the Maltese community; everybody, although not necessarily knowing each other, were always willing, and happy to help one another.

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        About five minutes later we arrived at the terminal, and were greeted by a buzz of many different languages. After collecting our luggage we made our way outside, again refreshed by the night air; now we were away from the fumes of the aircraft, it was possible to elucidate many different scents, when the wind blew, I detected a faint smell of food cooking: a sign of the typical Maltese habit of continuously throwing barbeques on the beaches at night. At times when the air was still, a person could be overcome by the sea scent; the salty air somehow ...

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The writer's impressions of arriving on Malta are expressed with language that effectively conveys his/her excitement and involvement in the experience. Strong adjectives, such as "engulfed", "cherished" and and "gargantuan" are handled skillfully to paint the scene and the essay abounds with the sights, sounds and smells of the island. Long sentences are attempted with mixed success, but overall the structures are well managed. There are some errors of punctuation but they are mostly minor. 4 stars