Isabella organises her extract with the way she reacts to first going into the jungle then she moves on to say a bit of what happened with some more emotions and then to describe what she heard and saw mixed with yet more emotions and description. David on the other hand merely gives any description throughout his writing. He starts off telling the reader precisely what happened when he first entered the jungle up to the time he leaves. I think this is quite good as they both use the same word in part of their extract (lianas). But he says, ‘the lianas, binding it to its neighbours tighten’. Isabella uses it in a different way with more description, ‘lianas, hanging, looping, twisting-their orange fruitage hanging over our heads’. Now they are two totally different approaches to this word that actually means: a type of climbing plant that twines around trees.
In the first extract she shares her experience on the opening line when she describes her reaction on first going into the jungle when she says, ‘the mystery of night in a strange place was wildly picturesque; the pale, greenish, undulating light of fire and the broad red waving glare of torches flashings fitfully on the skeleton pier’
She gets right into her thoughts of this place and describing it that the way it comes together may give you the impression that it is from a children’s book. It gives me this impression because she really tries to build up a picture in the readers head in which the way she has written a piece of her introduction. However, as for David who wrote the second extract, he tells the reader the way he saw it, the way it was, I quote from his opening line, ‘ forest trees fall eventually, whether or not man cuts them down’ I thought that on this piece of writing he goes straight into it as if he knows all the minor details and he is just informing us readers of the facts. Also, he doesn’t give much description here like Isabella. He just tells you the way it was not trying to build up any picture in your mind, like he has seen it all before and is more a factual writer.
Isabella’s personal thought of the jungle at the end of her extract is a bit more describing but she basically says that what she wrote isn’t even half of what she saw. That it was so great that no words could describe it far less that hers. She made it sound so wonderful when she says, ‘this new wonder world so enchanting, tantalising, intoxicating, makes me see despair, for I can’t make you see what I am seeing!’ This puts the icing on the cake for her extract as she gave so much description throughout, and built up a picture into your mind, then she goes on to say that it was so much better than what we are thinking and that she can’t even merely describe it. It was like a ‘new planet’. David doesn’t really give a personal comment at the end of his. This may be because his feelings are show throughout his writing or simply because unlike Isabella this isn’t a ‘new planet’ to him. It’s some where that he has been, seen and doesn’t seem to keen.
