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English – Original Writing Coursework

GCSE English Original Writing Coursework

First chapter to a story

Audience:

 Teenagers/young adults

Author:

 Faisal Iqbal

She was perched silently on the fortress wall, her long, dark coat billowing behind her like the wings of a dark angel. The browns and cold greys of the industrial sector sprawled out before her, the glow and safety of the city only barely visible on the horizon. The embankment was steep behind her, but before her the old fortifications created a steep drop. Below, a stagnant river struggled to reflect the factories and bleak concrete buildings that bordered it. The dizzying heights didn’t seem to bother her as she sat there, her eyes fixed on the huge metallic citadel that dominated the skyline, her expression almost contemplative, and watched

.A dark transit van, perhaps once black but now tainted grey with dust and grime, quietly pulled up at the bottom of the of the embankment. It was barely dusk, and the fog lights merely glowed in the fading light. There was a time when the caretaker would lock the park gates when it got dark, but there was no caretaker any more. The trees and grass had ended a while back, leaving just a dust track lined with cobblestones.

The girl perched atop the fortress wall heard the gravelly sound of a vehicle pulling up somewhere behind her, and the slamming of a door, but it didn’t bother her. She appeared to be young – perhaps in her early or mid twenties – with unblemished skin and slight feminine curves. Her skin was smooth and pale, her hair dark and elegant - not quite black, and hanging to just below her shoulder. Most of it was tucked behind one ear, exposing her soft, youthful features to the twilight.

The owner of the van was no longer in his vehicle. Not taking his eyes off the creature perched on the fortress, he closed the van door behind him, and started to pace up the embankment.

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The girl continued to survey the industrial sector. The place was dead, devoid of life, an abandoned maze of rust-clad factories, chimneys and water tanks. Electricity pylons towered over most of the buildings, and a network of overhead cables created a black web over the entire area. She sensed the man approaching, yet made no movement to suggest that this was the case. She continued to perch on the high wall, with her coat no longer billowing, but rippling in the gentle breeze; her eyes watching yet not really seeing, her mind being elsewhere.

The man had almost ...

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