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Original Writing Coursework Commentary Mysterious Island is an extract from a novel, in the style of Dennis Lehane, and so contains many aspects of a thriller, horror novel.

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´╗┐Original Writing Coursework Commentary Mysterious Island is an extract from a novel, in the style of Dennis Lehane, and so contains many aspects of a thriller, horror novel. It employs a semantic field of horror, created through the use of the noun phrase ?intensified wind?, and the nouns ?beast? and ?petrified? these are predicative adjectives which suggest fear and uncertainty. The first chapter of a novel aims to set the scene and introduce the main character. Mysterious Island does this through elevated vocabulary, such as the pre-modifier ?howling? which creates a tense atmosphere and the use of figurative devices such as the personification of the trees: ?the trees watched her every move, whispering in to the wild winds?. The alliteration of the consonant ?w? in this complex sentence starting to develop the main character?s fear whilst the imagery suggests she is being watched ? a repeated motif in the chapter. The island is described as ?isolated? and ?uninhabitable? these adjectives both creating the necessary atmosphere for a thriller, needed to create suspense. This also adds to the cliff-hanger ending when it is revealed that she is not alone on the island. The audience for the novel would be adults and this is reflected in the themes of the extract: isolation and predators. ...read more.


The interrogative adjective ?would anyone know?? are used to create a clear picture that show she is on her own with no one to save her also this creates a more intimate relationship . The evaluative adjective ?petrifying? and the descriptive adjective ?dark? these add horror as they convey she is going through a rough time as it is hard to see at night. They also show the feelings of the character. The conjunction used is to show the terror of the woman as well as showing the reader there could be a lot of events occurring throughout the extract. modifiers convey the emotions presented from the woman as she is trying to find a way out the adverbs ?violently?, ?rigidly? and ?quickly? these are all active verbs to show the reader that the woman is undergoing huge fright and horror also she is trying to find a way out but there is no possible exit of the island which Also strengthen the fact she is isolated and is helpless as there is no one human on the island beside her, which make the reader interested as I use elevated vocabulary to make the novel sound terrifying ?she was next to a narrow stream which was becoming furious with rage. The personification used here is to show that the island is a malicious place to be and Stacy is all by herself with nothing to help her which relates to her crimes. ...read more.


The personal pronoun is possessive ?her? this describes that she is on her own with no one to help her which makes the reader feel sympathy for her. I have also used a simile ?darker than the night?, to provide greater emphasis on her feelings and makes it seem more dramatic because it expresses her feelings the emotive word ?darker? describes the emotions presented by the woman which shows that she is in a terrible state also it shows she is in two minds which helps to build more tension. The interrogative is effective as it shows the reader she is in danger also she has found shelter which shows she is making progress in surviving but could this lead to difficulties ?Was this right?? Also this allows the reader to be more emerged in the extracting as they think they are being told the story in person. Third person is used to address all of the audience also to show a clear view of things occurring in the extract, ?Stacy?. This is to allow the reader to know the suspense, feelings and danger created; this allows the reader to get more information. The last chapter uses a rhetorical ?throat scream? this is used as it relates to the audience because they will have the same feeling as her also it shows that this could be her last moment in the extract which stresses the importance of horror and suspense. ...read more.

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