Suspense and Tension Story: House of 4W

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Faraz Razi-10 1S                                                 12th June 2003

Eng Lang (creative writing) Coursework:

Suspense and Tension Story: House of 4W

  I was driving for about three hours when I had realised I had taken the wrong turning and was hopelessly lost. I pulled over to the side and found my mobile phone in order to phone for help. Surprisingly, the battery had gone completely low and I began to feel a sense of panic as it was rapidly becoming darker. In the distance, I saw the outline of a house and I thought I could detect smoke coming out from the chimney. I decided that I had no option but to make my way to the house and ask for directions, as well as the use of the telephone as my family would be getting worries about me.

  I drove to the house, which was completely isolated and as I pulled up outside, my car engine abruptly cut out. I continued pushing the accelerator pedal, but to no avail the car would not start. I stepped out of my car, closed the door, and began to walk towards the house. As I stepped closer, a sense of dreariness overcame me as I noticed the house to be all black, with no particular architectural design to give it character, nor any sign of life within the home.

  Just before I grasped the doorknocker, in false hope of finding assistance, I caught a hint of light in the corner of my right eye. I turned to see where it came from, only to ease myself when I made out a cyclist in the distance. My salvation had arrived

“Excuse me”, I shouted out aloud, “could you help me? You see, I’m lost and I was wondering if you could give me some directions…”

The ease was short lived, since as soon as the hood of the overcoat the cyclist was wearing came down, an old, withered lady was divulged.

  I took a step back aghast, startled by her exposure, for she was pale as chalk and as repulsive as a gargoyle. I repeated myself, simply to have my voice drowned out by my hesitance. In due course, the old lady tilted her head, her eyes locked with mine. Subsequently, she raised her eyes up towards the monotonous, towering house that stood ominous behind me. Careful not to miss any vital information she may provide me with, I kept my eyes level with those of the old lady, and finally I caught her answer, which scarcely managed to escape past her twisted, skeletal lips

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“You…you want to enter that house?” she whispered, “I wouldn’t. Very peculiar, that house.”

  Confused, I opened my mouth to question her statement, but it was of no use. The old lady had turned her back on me, literally, and she departed, echoing her words in the wind

“Very peculiar, that house.”

  I turned around; facing the direction the old lady had entered, in hope of another passer by, in hope of sufficient help. Though I was in desperate search for some support, I gave up, concluding fearfully that I was lost, without communication, without means ...

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