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The Commentary for the Reading Piece

Due to my strong interest in short stories and mysteries, I decided to write my story based around a mystery for people aged twelve or older.

        Firstly, I looked at the vocabulary because, it is very important to be able to understand and increase the tension if necessary in the story. The vocabulary in my story is fairly basic this is shown by,

                “Still in the back of my mind, I thought of the mysterious sack.”

        The words that I have chosen are simple and easy to understand and I have used words like, “Dog” instead of another word like, “Canine”.

        I also tried to build up the characters in my story even though it was a short story and did not allow much character building because I wanted the mystery to develop. The way in which I built up each character was through many techniques. The first was by using a dialogue such as,

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                “What it you want? “Bernard said”

        The speech that I used for Bernard made him seem hostile and this may make the reader believe there is a mystery to be uncovered, because he is not forthcoming and friendly. I have also used dialogue to help find out more from the mystery for example,

                “Where did you get that?”

        This is very useful, but also I have included description to help emphasise important parts of the story shown by,

                “I had a piece of material, it was brown, with white polka dot spots on it.”

        The piece of material which, ...

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