Some, of us were born loving fashion and some just weren’t. Whether you love it or hate it your personal style and fashion is very important to whom you are as a person. Why? Because it reflects you as an individual; beside when you look good, you feel good! Fashion can transform your personality I mean isn’t it amazing how clothes can make a person?
Have you, ever heard the phrase “you are what you wear”? YES! Yes because more than 20%of us hare this phrase on a day to day bias. Our clothes tell us who we are in a society and tell others about our personalities, our wants, needs, talents, dispositions and destination. It has been said by Mrs. Rosie Montage, professor of social psychology that 98% of what we say does not come from our mouth. If so then clothing is a very silent but tremendously powerful communicator. It can camouflage or cover up; it can build or destroy an image, it can say “I am as good as you”, “I have the same interest”, “I am important”, “I am not important” or even “I take myself and work too seriously! But by judging someone based on their appearance makes them feel inferior. Why? Because you are assuming that you know them better than they know themselves; that’s just deceitful as every single human sees the world through different eyes! Never the less appearance is all so essential as it is the only visible clue to individuals, individuality, which has now become a mean for us humans to evaluate others. We simply do this by assessing the outfit the person is wearing the moment they enter a room.
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Quality of writing
Unfortunately, careless errors are commonplace within the text. The candidate has difficulty using the apostrophe correctly, as in the example of “your†[you’re]. Semi-colons accuracy is somewhat hit-and-miss yet given that this is sophisticated punctuation the candidate is not judged harshly for this. There are a number of ‘typos’, such as “properly†[probably] and “scientist†[scientists] which are disappointing in coursework pieces – note please, spell check is not a substitute for proof-reading. However, there are numerous examples of higher-level syntax as in the example of “psychologicallyâ€Â, “camouflage†and “tremendously powerful communicatorâ€Â.
Level of analysis
This leads to the point that is the absence of any real counter-argument to strengthen the writer’s own conclusion; eating disorders could have been explored as being a case where fashion is arguably considered a detrimental industry. Despite this, the candidate uses a number of features deftly to engage the reader. For example, synthetic personalisation (“in our success in lifeâ€Â), direct address (“you feel goodâ€Â) and statistics (“25% of peopleâ€Â) are all features common in successful articles which add authenticity to the text and create a relationship between writer and reader. In addition to this, variation in sentence length is also impressive, with minor sentences such as “Fashion. What is it?†helping capture the reader’s attention. However, this is also an example of rhetorical questioning which, along with exclamatory statements, are used excessively within the response – such devices are only effective when used sparingly.
Response to question
The response is coherent and focused, dealing with a range of issues and implications relating to fashion. However, certain issues raises could have been dealt with in greater detail. For example, “eating disordersâ€Â, as mentioned at the end of paragraph three is a poignant issue for many readers and so perhaps mentioning a well-known celebrity example here would have worked well.
