“After a moment the proprietor emerged from the interior of his establishment and gazed hollow-eyed at the car.”
The atmosphere and lack of any kind of community in the valley has had an effect on him, as he stumbles through his life with no vitality and nothing to set him apart from the crowd.
Since the rest of the characters in the valley make up this wasteland, aren’t they a waste? Fitzgerald shows this in the following extract.
“Occasionally a line of grey cars crawls along an invisible track, gives out a ghastly creak, and comes to rest, and immediately the ash-grey men swarm up with leaden spades and stir up an impenetrable cloud, which screens their obscure observations from your sight.”
This paragraph is densely written, and appeals to many senses, whilst laving you still in doubt. The men’s “obscure observations” is similar to insects and parasites, as they “crawl along the invisible track”. Fitzgerald has dehumanised these workers, and they have no identity, and like all parasites, they are a waste. The use of “leaden spades” shows onomatopoeia, suggesting that the word sounds the way in which it has been written and Fitzgerald uses this a great deal throughout ‘The Great Gatsby’. To a reader the use of onomatopoeia, creates a clearer picture in their mind, which means that they can envision the scenes taking place, especially in ‘The Valley of the Ashes’ where description and poetic techniques are important to convey the right atmosphere.
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Within the description of ‘The Valley of Ashes’, Fitzgerald also uses poetic techniques such as personification.
“The motor road hastily joins the railroad and runs beside it for a quarter of a mile”
This creates an image that the motor road is slightly human, is able to literally do the things that a person can do. This sounds a little sinister, and carries threatening overtones towards a reader.
Alliteration is also used frequently throughout ‘The Great Gatsby’, and Fitzgerald uses this very effectively in describing the Valley, with images such as “fantastic farms” and “grotesques gardens” being used throughout the passage that describes the ‘Valley of the Ashes’. Alliteration in this context is excessively descriptive, and seizes the attention of the reader very quickly. This poetic technique helps a reader picture the description more vividly.
The eyes of Dr T. J Eckleburg are ever watchful over the Valley. They continue watching over the ‘solemn dumping ground’ day and night. Fitzgerald has created these faceless eyes to establish some aspect of religion within the ‘Valley of the Ashes’. These eyes watch over the scenes that unfold in the ‘Valley of the Ashes’, but they never offer any judgement.
Fitzgerald also uses Dr T. J Eckleburg’s eyes to personalise the novel.
“You perceive”
This change of narrative effectively brings the reader into the scene, confuses the reader initially, as the eyes seem a bizarre and surreal image, as “retina’s one yard high” are not a natural image. However, as the passage unfolds, it is easy to establish that these faceless eyes are only an advertisement.
“Evidently some wild wag of an oculist set them there to fatten his practice in the Borough of Queens, and then sank down himself into eternal blindness, or forgot them and moved away.”
The use of “wild wag” shows more alliteration, and some sarcasm, which Fitzgerald tends to use in ‘The Great Gatsby’. Fitzgerald has used “eternal blindness” as irony in this passage, indicating that the owner of the advertisement has died.
In conclusion I feel that Fitzgerald produces a very convincing and realistic opening to ‘The Valley of the Ashes’ and describes it most effectively. His use of Alliteration, Simile, Onomatopoeia, Personification and Diction all help create an atmosphere that is empty and barren. However Fitzgerald also uses less obvious techniques, such as embroidering irony and sarcasm throughout the novel, I think that a reader studying this novel finds his techniques a little excessive sometimes, nevertheless he manages to develop ‘The Valley of Ashes’ through these extreme techniques, and does this very soundly as an author.