What caused the Soufrire Hills Volcano to erupt?

Review of essay

Rating: 5 star(s)

Response to the question

The student demonstrates a high level of understanding to the eruption right from the start as their introduction shows a clear knowledge towards the tectonic plate theory which caused the eruption. The answer is well supported by evidence and each point the student makes is clearly supported. This creates a convincing and fluent piece of written work which would score the student very high marks. Their response is very clear as the student has laid out the work under subtitles which helps guide the examiner through the work.

Level of analysis

The level of analysis is excellent. The student supports each point well with evidence and evaluated the evidence they found. Perhaps a bibliography would have been good to show the sources used for this piece of work. The appropriate conclusion was made using well supported material. I would suggest that any diagrams / pictures and so on be sourced accordingly as well to avoid infringing copyright or being accused of plagiarism. The response was coherent and well developed through the use of strong and well selected evidence.

Quality of writing

The spelling and grammar and punctuation were fine. I found one mistake of "slighlty" instead of "slightly". This shows the lack of proof reading which is essential in limiting such silly mistakes. However, one slip up like this would not affect the mark greatly, although the impression on the examiner is not very good. The technical terms were appropriately used and well integrated into the answer. The student does not present their work in one long essay format which is interesting. However, there is no 'right' way to present geography work like this and using subtitles is a sensible way as well as presenting it as one long extended essay.