“After the Putsch failed Hitler decided to use democratic methods to become leader of Germany”

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After the Putsch failed Hitler decided to use democratic methods

to become leader of Germany”

Before the Munich Putsch in November 1923. Hitler’s aims were to overthrow the Government, to make Germany a stronger and better country, to create a master race, to destroy the Treaty of Versailles and to become Leader of Germany. His methods in doing this were violent and illegal, not democratic whatsoever.

After the Munich Putsch failing Hitler was sentenced to 5 years in jail but only served 9 months. Prison did not change him though, his aims were still the same and he still wanted to become an all powerful Leader of Germany, therefore his aims did not change since the beginning of the Munich Putsch, but his thinking time in prison made him realise that his method in trying to forfill his aims were wrong and that he had to take a different approach to how he was going to this. Instead of violent, illegal acts, i.e. The Munich Putch, he realised that if a Democratic approach was taken on his actions then this would help him succeed and instead of seen as trying to rebel against the government, he was seen as trying to make Germany a better place. This shows that Hitler’s methods did change since being arrested and put into Prison.

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In order to use this new method, Hitler and the Nazi Party needed to attract votes from the German people.

Hitler did 5 main things to increase his chance in achieving his dream of being Leader of Germany. One of these things was the National Party, this set up many parties around the country making sure that everyone in German knew whom Adolf Hitler was and what he was trying to do. This helped Hitler because he would bribe people into voting for him. Another change he made was the number of Nazi organisations he created. Hitler set up ...

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Apart from one spelling mistake and a few questionable comma usages, the grammar and spelling are sound in this essay. The student has used the appropriate terms in the essay and followed a typical structure for the essay (chronological). Where marks fall in this essay is the failure of developing the examples made - the student writes well and needs to clarify the argument more and cannot assume that the examiner is able to see what they are implying in the essay.

The student gives many examples to back up their argument which is great, but is actually superfluous. One or two is enough to demonstrate the understanding and to illustrate a point in the argument. On the other hand, if one of the examples were explained further (this essay demonstrates a good attempt) then the marks will be higher. One thing I personally felt was missing from the essay was the writing of "My Struggle" by Hitler during his months in prison. I believe that through the book, others were able to understand Hitler more and gained him fame - likewise the Putsch also put Hitler into a new peak in his bid to change Germany. This said, a strong conclusion and argument was still very evident. Yet, I would disagree to the concluding line of Hitler's "world domination" as I would argue that Hitler's main aim was always race purity which would lead to world domination rather than world domination alone (a slight difference to that suggested by the student).

The structure of the student's essay is very good and consequently aided the fluency of the essay. The argument was very evident and well supported and hence, the conclusion was very strong. However, the introduction failed to give an overview to answering the question and the student has adopted a systematic and chronological approach to answering the question instead - demonstrating knowledge of what happens before, then during and after. I would suggest that the introduction needs to address the question immediately - i.e. by suggesting (as the student later implies) that the methods Hitler used were changed to being democratic because it would gain him more support but as always, there were also other things that tied in to help Hitler pave his way to becoming leader of Germany. This latter point, is something many students forget to address (or 'skim' over the details) but this student has done well not to fall into this common pitfall.