10PA Debbie Reeve 08/05/2007
- Although some people may not be aware of the power the Internet holds upon us, it is essential that all users are aware of the dangers which lurk beyond the flashing text and fancy web pages. The term ‘WWW’ means ‘World Wide Web’ which is literally what the Internet is, as it is a way in which we are connected with the rest of the world and also to what is going on throughout the minds of certain individuals and governments. The ‘Web’ that the Internet is associated with, can weave in many different ways. It can lead us to many opportunities to help the needy and also to useful resources, or can even be a form of contact with loved ones. It maybe even the key to unlock problems around the world. However, not everything found on the Internet is safe and useful, as the dark side of the ‘Web’ can trap the user and lead them into grave problems.
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Quality of writing
The report is quite informal, as this layout and style is quite awful. The font colour is 'red' and this should be 'black'. The title of the report, is quite large and this should be text and 'black'. In regard to the text, this should be broken down a little more into sizeable paragraphs. The report states 'WWW', however there haven't fully explained what this term means. 'WWW' is an network of internet web pages, and any computer device can connect to the network, proving if there have internet access. The report states that information should be correct during elections. The term that the report should include is 'informed decision', as an informed decision is having all the necessary accurate information to make a decision. If the information is in-correct or misleading the person cannot make an informed decision.
Level of analysis
The report states that it's essential that people are aware of the power of the internet. However why do there need to be aware? The report could include 'People should be aware of the internet as large quantities of resources are now only accessible on-line. A number of government services are on-line, and this could enable a person to access important information within their society'. The student states that there is a number of harmful/bogus material on the internet. However there haven't shown any real examples/case studies of what there mean. The report could include a screenshot of a pop-up advertisement, or a website which may be harmful to the user.
Response to question
In summary, the report is OK. The report states the benefits/drawbacks of the internet. However this is quite basic (lacking detail), and the layout/design of the document is very difficult to read. The report states 'the dark side of the web'. This could be re-phased to 'the drawbacks of the web'. As this phrase is more professional, and it's clear to the examiner that the student is talking about the benefits and drawbacks of the internet. The point 2, which states the student's own opinion, is quite good. As there have justified their own point of view, which is explaining to the examiner why there believe that their opinion is valid.