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Fighting for survival.

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Fighting for survival Chapter one For a split second the bombing had stopped, and my ears had stopped pounding from the cross fire. Everything quietened except for the cries, aches and pains from wounded soldiers left to cope. I could feel my exasperating feet sinking back into the mud. Stood behind a tree for cover I took my rest before charging towards enemy lines and as I stood there all I could think about was how I got myself into this mess. "In August 1915, I enlisted as a volunteer, encouraged by my wife "go and fight for your country" she used to say. In January 1916 I received my call up papers, but I managed to put it off for, until 8th June 1916 when I was sent for basic training to Ashton-under-Lyne, just outside Manchester. After short training, In 1917 I was sent to France, landing at Le Havre, where we were drafted into groups of 250, and my group was scheduled to fight in France unfortunately where most of the heavy fighting was taking place. This pace where shear hell, in the mornings I was always woken by the sound of the birds singing through the thin fog. ...read more.


"No, we will have to give him a service or something. The Mitchell's and everybody gathered around the body. "Private Christopher Hall" I said as I read out from the dog tag which I pulled and placed in my pocket "It seems that Hall barely had a chance to enjoy his life dying so young the Lieutenant began. As we are standing here watching the body of a loving husband and father please god do not let us suffer the same fate. "Amen." The Lieutenant was the only one who said anything. Then, Smith put the departed soldier's helmet over his face, as a final act. With that done, there was not another word was said about Hall, and we began to move forward. Fighting For survival Analysis The text I am analysing is the first chapter of a story, and because of this I knew I had to make it exiting and dramatic so that the reader keeps on reading the book. After giving the text to different people feedback has told me that I managed to do this successful. The story I have written takes place in the First World War I have shown this quite clearly as in the first paragraph I have described a scene where by a ...read more.


I have also made use of metaphors "this place was shear hell" "I was always woken by the singing of birds through the thin fog" this makes sentence easier to describe without going in to detail. The use of sentence is very different depending on what is happening in the story in the beginning I have used long complex sentences so that I am able to describe fully the situation, in the middle where the regiment are being attacked I have used simple short sentence to show fast movement. The story I have written is aimed at the older population as it contains negative sentences "the bullet had torn right into hall's eyeball and lodged in the back of his head. The use of complex sentences in some of the areas such as "my eyes shifted all about as if they were radar detecting the enemy" may make it to difficult to read for younger audiences. The purpose for my story is to entertain I have done this quite successfully as it seems reading other war stories it is quite difficult to write but I took up the task and feedback has told me I have done this quite successful at it. Salmah aslam English coursework ...read more.

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