La famille traditionnelle est-elle en crise?
La famille traditionnelle était deux parents- une mère et un père, avec deux ou trois enfants, dans le passé. Mais aujourd’hui tout a changé! En ce moment il y ont trois raisons pour les changements da la famille traditionnelle.
Le premier raison est qu’il y a beaucoup plus des familles avec seulement un parent a cause d’un grand taux de divorce dans notre société. Par exemple, 1,3 familles sur dix en France sont monoparentales. Les parents font moins d’effort de sauver un mariage aujourd’hui donc ils se séparer et les enfants ont, normalement, seulement une mère – 24% ne voient jamais leur père! Ça c’est un grand changement parce que dans le passé les divorces étaient mal et ils étaient moins normaux. N’avoir pas un père change les dynamiques de la famille et les enfants reçoivent moins puisqu’il n’y a pas beaucoup de l’argent qui est difficile. Le taux de divorce est une crise.
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Quality of writing
The candidate has used a range of tenses and a range of syntax and vocabularly appropriate for this level. However there are some grammatical mistakes: « Il y ont » should never be used to mean ‘There are’ – it should always be « Il y a », even when dealing with plurals. If you have not yet been taught the subjunctive, avoid using constructions such as « Je crois que… » to express your opinion, and stick to phrases such as « A mon avis… », « Je pense que… » etc which take the indicative. However, the candidate’s work is largely accurate and flows nicely.
Level of analysis
The level of analysis is at a suitable standard for a GCSE modern languages candidate. S/he has made ample use of statistics to make points about various aspects of the changes to family life – divorce, the rise in single parent families and “non-nuclear†families, age at which we get married etc, and has offered opinions on the reasons behind this, whether it is good/bad and so on. There is little the candidate could do to improve here, although perhaps in one or two places he/she could elaborate further on a point they have made, for example, when concluding s/he writes « Mais en général, j’avoue que la famille est différent mais je ne trouve pas une crise parce il y ont beaucoup de familles avec deux parents ». Perhaps the candidate could discuss the various reaons for single-parent families, and why it can sometimes be a beneficial arrangement. However, the essay is generally well argued for an MFL essay at this level.
Response to question
This candidate has written a very good and interesting essay on the subject of “La Famille Traditionelleâ€Â, although he/she has made some minor grammatical mistakes and s/he could expand his/her thoughts further in places. In general, though, the candidate discusses well facts relating to changes in family life, and offers some reasons that may have contributed towards them, as well as offering his/her opinion on the matter. This is the format which should be followed to achieve high marks; there is a clear structure and line of thought which makes the candidate’s writing and opinion easy to follow.