Danilo Carri
Politics
Evaluate the case for using Referenda to decide important issues in the UK
This essay is about the use of referenda in the UK Democracy. A referendum is when a nationwide vote is held by government to obtain the nations point of view on a political matter. They are used to decide what actions should be taken when an issue arises that effects the constitution.
In this essay I will be assessing the pros and cons that referendums propose and using what I establish as good and bad aspects to answer if referenda should be used more often or if they should be used only in special circumstances.
There are two types of democracy, the first being ‘direct democracy’. Direct democracy involves the direct and continuous participation by the general public with political issues. This practically means that people have to vote everyday on issues that parliament have to decide on. The second type of democracy is ‘representative democracy’. Representative democracy is indirect government by the people through representatives elected by the people. In the UK there are 658 constituencies each having their own representatives. People within those constituencies vote for both general and bi elections and depending on which party won in the constituency an MP for a party will go through. Referenda falls under the category of ‘direct democracy’.
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Quality of writing
Quality of Writing There are some minor errors in this essay, such as the candidate referring to by-elections as "bi elections", and some grammatical structures and turns of phrase that I would not use, for example "the UK and its European Brothers" and a split infinitive - "to not be". However, these examples do not obscure the candidate's meaning and therefore I feel that they would most likely be overlooked, especially at GCSE level. However, proofreading and checking through an essay before handing it in, or leaving a few minutes at the end of an exam are very good habits to have.
Level of analysis
Level of Analysis The level of analysis is of a high standard; the candidate discusses and examines the advantages and disadvantages of the increased use of referenda in appropriate level of detail, with the underlying direct vs. representative democracy, and the constitutional and legal questions raised by the use of referenda briefly included. More expansive discussion of these issues would demonstrate a high level of thinking, however it is not needed at GCSE in order to achieve a good grade. Examples from contemporary politics are provided to support the candidate's arguments. The judgements made have led the candidate to a clear conclusion, with personal opinions included, which are appropriate at GCSE level.
Response to question
Response to Question The candidate's response is generally very good, briefly describing referenda, and taking into account many different issues surrounding the use of referenda. However, there is a lack of clarity at times, for example, the candidate writes "depending on which party won in the constituency an MP for a party will go through", and specifying what exactly this means would make the essay better and the candidate seem stronger. In the paragraph on Scottish and Welsh devolution, it could be interpreted that the candidate is saying that power was devolved to the Scottish Parliament in 1979, whereas it was in 1997. The otherwise accurate nature of the candidate's knowledge of devolution in the UK is undermined by this failure to clarify his/her point, and could lead to a loss of marks.