An evaluation of the impact of glaciation on human activity
Introduction:
In this essay I will talk about the impact of glaciation on human activity and whether this is a negative effect or a positive effect. I will explain why it is positive or a negative effect by using some examples such as ,hydro electric power plants (hep) (fig 1) tourism, transport on valley glaciers, the impact on water sources and farming in east Anglia. Some of the areas I will talk about that have had the impact of glaciation on their human activity will be the fox glacier village in New Zealand, the sima hep plant in Norway (fig 2).
Research and examples and explanation:
Sima hep plant has both positive and negative effects from the glaciation the first one I will say is a positive. This positive is tourism. Tourism has been improved since the hep plant has been built because the biggest tourist attraction in the area is the Vøringsfossen water fall. The development of Sima has affected the flow of water that flows to the falls. In the summer the discharge of water was 12 meters per second so it is a spectacular site.
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Quality of writing
There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, but they are not major. I do feel that it could read better, take for example the section where it says ' the first one i will say is positive' this does not sound right instead they could have said 'the first effect on the surrounding area is positive and i will now focus on this'. People are more likely to award marks if what they are reading is easy to follow and you do not have to try and work out what the writer is trying to convey.
Level of analysis
The basic reasons behind the conclusions are good and valid, but I feel that at some points that there could had been more explanation behind the points as it might have gained them a few more marks. Using images to back up your points is entirely valid and in some cases pictures can better illustrate a point than words can, but in this case maybe the images could have been embedded next to or near to the point that they were backing up. The conclusion reached is appropriate when considering the arguments given.
Response to question
The student has answered the question set with fair reasoning and with the use of images to back up the points made. I do feel although that the reasoning could be more explicit in places, so try and expand any and every point you makes as it shows the examiner that you do really know what you are on about.