Russell Nash
Blue-Green Algae, or Cyanophyta, are simple organisms that are believed to be the evolutionary link between bacteria and green plants. Fossils that are over three billion years old have been discovered in sediments and are concluded to be one of the first organisms to release oxygen into the atmosphere. Today, Cyanophyta are abundant throughout the world, found in salt marshes, on tree trunks, in fish tanks etc. Besides the typical bluish-green colour, Cyanophyta can vary from a blackish-green to an orange-yellow. As well as providing an evolutionary link, Blue-Green Algae serve an integral part of our lives with its importance in food supplements as well as its ability to cause economic damage via algal blooming. In this essay I aim to show the similarities and differences between Cyanophyta and bacteria using points of comparison, to answer the question whether Blue-Green Algae can be classed as bacteria.
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Quality of writing
The candidate communicates well. Some parts of the text are hard to decipher because of the swing between comparisons and it is not clear whether it is the bacteria or algae that is being discussed, so care should be taken to make this clear. Punctuation, spelling and grammar are fine, with minor grammatical errors in places. The bibliography is not that useful because it doesn't state which bits of the text came from where.
Level of analysis
The introduction is to a very high level. The candidate discusses why there is the question about whether the algae are plants and also why the algae is considered important to humans. Rather than comparing why the algae may be bacteria in a solid text, I would have used a diagram of similarities to bacteria and differences so it is much easier to discern the differences as it is easy to get lost in the bulk of text. The candidate provides good comparisons to reach an adequate conclusion based on the evidence they analysed.
Response to question
Overall a good comparison piece. The candidate discusses the similarities and differences with very in depth scientific detail that I would expect of a candidate higher than GCSE level. Sometimes, because of the comparison the text can be hard to follow in places, but this is only a minor problem. The candidate conveys their ideas clearly.