Black Hole
Group No. 6
A black hole is a theorized celestial body whose surface gravity is so strong that no light can escape from within it. It is one of the three postulated final stages of stellar evolution wherein a star’s core cools and contracts and begins to collapse under the enormous weight of the outer layers. No black hole has ever been identified but scientists have described certain parts of the universe where they might exist.
A black hole is a theorized celestial body whose surface gravity is so strong that no light can escape from within it. Although black holes have been of intense scientific interest only in the later 20th century, the concept goes back to the French mathematician Pierre Simon de Laplace. In a 1798 treatise Laplace agreed with Isaac Newton that light is composed of particles. He reasoned that if enough mass were added to a star like the sun, the gravitational force of the star would eventually become so great that its escape velocity would equal the velocity of light. At that point, light particles would not be able to leave the surface of the star, and it would blink out and become an invisible black star.
More than a century later, Albert Einstein, in his special theory of relativity, maintained that nothing can move faster than light. This means that Laplace’s black stars are also black holes, because if light cannot escape, all other matter must be trapped as well. The surface of the black hole thus acts like a one-way membrane: material may fall into a black hole, but no information or energy can come out of a black hole. The detailed properties of black holes are studied by using Einstein’s general theory of relativity and gravitation.
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This essay is reasonably well written and the candidate has used appropriate technical terms throughout their work which demonstrates a good understanding of this topic. However there are one or two grammatical errors and some issues with spelling in which the candidate has used the American version of some words.
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