- Introduction ………… 1
- Background science ………… 2
- Arguments for ………… 3
- Arguments against ………… 4
- Comparing arguments ………… 5
- Conclusion ………… 6
- Bibliography ………… 7
In this case study I will be analyzing the different theories about sunbathing and staying in the sun for long periods of time. I will be looking at both for and against arguments and backing these points up with scientific evidence. I will also be analyzing the reliability of the sources, as well as including my own personal opinions.
It is said that many people think sunbathing is bad for you, but it is important that you get a little because everyone needs vitamin D, which you can get from the sun. Some people think sunbathing is good for you, but if you’re in the sun to long it can be very dangerous. Warnings about the dangers of the sun are starker than ever, and skin cancer is now the most commonly diagnosed cancer in Britain. Experts at Cancer Research UK fear that rates of melanoma, the most serious form, are likely to treble in the next 30 years. However, new research suggests that some exposure to UV rays is essential for good health, and may even protect against other forms of cancer.
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Quality of writing
This essay is reasonably well written, though the layout of the section on background science is poor. By writing information in this style, you make your essay difficult to follow as the information jumps from point to point. At this level of qualification you should be able to write scientific information in continual prose. On a more positive note, the candidate uses a good range of vocabulary and there are no grammatical or spelling errors with the exception of a few words that have been spelt using the American version of the spelling.
Level of analysis
It is evident from the information that the candidate has mentioned in this report that they have taken the time to research this subject. This is important when writing a science based essay as it is essential that you get the facts right. Furthermore it demonstrates an ability to learn independently and shows enthusiasm towards your subject. Additional, the candidate has also provided a bibliography with links to webpages they have used for research, this is important as it shows the steps you have taken in order to prepare for your essay. Finally, had the candidate combined their paragraph for comparing arguments and their concluding paragraph they would have a reasonably well written conclusion. To write a good conclusion, you should include a personal response as the candidate has done but you should also summarise key points from within your essay and state why these are important. This helps to tie together any loose ends and allows you to draw your essay to a close.
Response to question
The candidates introduction is a good start to this report, they have clearly stated exactly what they plan to discuss, this is important as you want the purpose of your essay to be clear to the reader. That said, the introduction could be improved by adding a brief description of your topic and by adding an interesting fact or quote which would help you to engage the reader, this is also important, by catching the readers attention straight away, the reader becomes invested in your work and is therefore more likely to read through all of your essay/report rather than simply skim through it. Overall this report is well written, the candidate has provided background information and they show some understanding of the scientific principles relating to this topic. Furthermore, they have included a contents page which is sensible when you have written several pages of information as it shows the layout of your work.
