Is the human race on a collision for its own destruction?
Before I begin I feel that I need to express a point. The point I must make is that this is my opinion about this chosen topic and I hope it will be read with a open mind and not cast down before it has been finished.
What I would like to discuss in written form is ‘Is the human race on a collision course for its own destruction’ which needs no further addressment by myself but I feel the need to express a point or two.
Human life has existed on this planet for a relatively short amount of time considering the age of the planet upon which we inhabit. We have evolved on Earth from a simple ‘goo’ that has been dubbed ‘primordial soup’ by those ever clever scientists.
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Quality of writing
The tone of this essay does not present a very good example, it is very personal from the start, and is an opinion, therefore all the scientific data contained in the data thereafter will be biased. Science essays should not be biased, and should be impersonal and factual in presentation. The only source of an opinion should after different evidence has been weighed in the conclusion. Minor grammatical errors are present and minor spelling mistakes. They communicate with their audience very well. Paragraphs are chosen well and the layout is good.
Level of analysis
The essay does not present any solid scientific principles but it is rather a scientific ethics essay considering whether or not humans will get along or if they will amount to their own destruction and if science is to blame. The candidate communicates their opinions very well and expressed some valid arguments that would hold their argument up in today's society. Their conclusion should try to point out some solutions to the problem and unfortunately it doesn't.
Response to question
The response to the question is answered well. The candidate communicates in a rather stylised way which should not be used for scientific essays, but this being tended towards an english piece it should be marked as such and it is a good example. It considers a range of arguments reaching a good conclusion and presents their opinion well.