Nanotechnology: Will it save us or destroy us? Tejal Vora 10W
The topic of this essay is Nanotechnology and this essay will be representing both sides of the controversial matter for whether or not this latest development in technology will lead us to prosperity or devastation, success or downfall. Nanotechnology is an upcoming development in our science departments and is also believed to have the potential to change the world, whether for or for worse is still being disputed. The institute of nanotechnology states that, “It offers ways to create smaller, cheaper, lighter and faster devices that can do more and cleverer things, use less raw materials and consume less energy.”[1]. However, there are people that simply say, “developing countries aiming to commercially exploit nanotechnology is quite a naive illusion”, like Canadian activist Pat Mooney [2]. The conversion of one nanometre is one-millionth of a millimetre. With the Nano scale, objects are so small that we can't see them with the naked eye or even with a microscope.
According to a few unofficial surveys, of the billions of people living in the world, only an extremely small percentage of people have heard of the concept of nanotechnology. As there are two sides to every story there are also two adverse effects and opinions of any scientific discovery or invention. Firstly, I will begin by saying that I believe that nanotechnology is the way forward but only to a certain limit of development as afterwards, in my opinion, scientists attempt to play the role of ‘God’ or whatever greater force they believe in.
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Quality of writing
Grammar, punctuation and grammar is good. At times there are phrases such as 'in the middle of this essay piece' which are not required at all. Use of technical terms could be improved to gain a higher grade. Overall it is a well structured response with an aid of image that helps understand the argument better.
Level of analysis
There definately isn't much to assess on the level of detail; way too broad to be able to gain a decent mark. But each of the points are completely relevant with a source supporting their argument. Ethical, social and economic implications are indirectly discusses such as nanotech weapons leading to an arms race and being used as a destructive weapon to kill masses. The conclusion is well structured weighing out the benefits with the risks. To improve I would research a study looking at the effects nanoparticles have when inhaled. This would support the point being made and help formulate a stronger argument.
Response to question
Although the coursework is shorter than what is should be, it provides a concise and objective response with effective use of sources. For example he writer clearly displays that nanotechnology could be 'commercially exploited' if it gets in the wrong hands but also be the most cost-effective creation ever produced. It is impressive that the response repeatly refers to surveys or reputable scientists; this suggests that he has tried to find reliable sources. I would improve this by actually assessing the reliability of the sources in the coursework. At times the response feels like a diary entry rather than a GCSE standard coursework- for example the use of the phrase 'caught my eye' is unnecessary in this content.