What are drugs?
A drug is a substance which alters the way the body works. Drugs which affect the brain fall into four main categories: Stimulants, Sedatives, Hallucinogens and Painkillers.
Stimulants
These drugs speed up the brain and make you alert. They include Amphetamines which were used for relieving blocked noses. Cocaine is one of them, found in the leaves off certain South American plants. Coffee and tea also contain caffeine (also a stimulant). Nicotine is also a stimulant, found in tobacco.
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Quality of writing
This essay is structured well and the clear sections makes it easy to follow. I would've liked to have seen a few more scientific terms - this feels like more of a PSHE essay than a biology investigation. Spelling, punctuation and grammar are fine throughout.
Level of analysis
The analysis is sound, but could be much more detailed. For example, when discussing that cocaine is a stimulant, I would've mentioned that it increases neurotransmission across the synapses. It is key to show understanding of the effects beyond "speed up the brain and make you alert". When mentioning stimulants, I like to note they increase motivation, heart rate, blood pressure, productivity and make you feel as if you need less sleep - this enables a good link to caffeine, allowing you to comment on why it is so popular in the morning! Such links to real-world applications will gain credit. When talking about drugs being dangerous, I would've hoped the discussion would be more sophisticated. Talking about alcohol and bus drivers isn't a strong example, whereas a teenager needing their stomach pumped is. An exploration of why dependency on drugs occurs, and why it is so difficult to stop addictions, would have been a useful area to gain marks. A common flaw when students talk about addiction is that they think heroine, nicotine and alcohol are the only examples. In my opinion, discussing an addiction to caffeine shows a full understanding of dependency.
Response to question
This essay offers a solid outline to drugs and their effect on the body, however there is plenty of room for improvement. I like how the essay is structured, offering a categorisation of drugs in the introduction and then an explanation of each. I would've like to have seen an exploration of the difference between legal and illegal drugs.