Death of a Salesman. Many symbols are included in the play. The tennis racquet, the seeds and the house are some of these symbols.

Review of essay

Rating: 3 star(s)

Response to the question

The student has identified the main symbols and motifs used in Death of a Salesman and drawn some relevant quotes from the play, yet the level of analysis fails to further expand their points. The conclusion does not draw together their answer in a way that encompasses what has been discussed in the body paragraphs; the introduction, however, sets out the main ideas quite succinctly. It may be a good idea to reconsider the structure of this answer: the conclusion especially remains in need of further elaboration. The student summarises their previous points, but does not draw them together in a way which demonstrates their ideas have developed into a coherent understanding of how the symbols and motifs feed into overarching thematic concerns.

Level of analysis

Although the basic symbolic function of the tennis racquet and seeds are supported by pertinent moments from the play, there needs to be another two or three sentences succeeding them which elaborate on how these symbols further Miller's central thematic concerns or aid characterisation. For instance, the student aptly identifies the way seeds that will never see sunlight figuratively reflect the futility inherent in the system, but rather than push the analogy to a further level of analysis, they remain on an essentially descriptive level. After identifying every symbol, the student would benefit from linking back to the premise they set out very well at the start: that the play argues the promises of the American Dream are founded on a harsh materialism that hides its unforgiving, cutthroat colours beneath ideals which innocent men like Willy place complete faith in, until their own ruin. The symbol of their house and the motif of the jungle feed into these ideological issues as well: the student has chosen to single out family dynamics as their primary function instead, which isn't incorrect, but it is somewhat simplistic. At this stage, some degree of secondary critical material would also be expected, of which there is none here.

Quality of writing

The quality of writing is average - punctuation needs attention, indeed, it sometimes hinders the meaning the student is trying to convey in a sentence or two. Many quotes have been dropped into the prose as an isolated sentence, rather than being linked to what it is they demonstrate. These need to be introduced, then demonstrated to further the point the writer is trying to make, otherwise they remain isolated and arbitrary inclusions.