To what extent are the characters in Ovid metamorphes real and not stereotypical
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Quality of writing
The essay is generally very well written, although there are a few spelling mistakes here and there (including in the title!) which could be eliminated with proofreading. It is a good idea for candidate to read over their work during any time they have left in the exam to eliminate any spg errors, as these create a bad impression on the examiner. There is a clear structure to the essay which makes the candidate’s argument very clear, but it does not obtrude too much on the reader or make the essay seem too formulaic, which is ideal. Overall a very good piece of work.
Level of analysis
The analysis provided by the candidate here is very good. He has quoted directly from the text, referred to literary tropes and archetypes (of which he displays a very good understanding) referenced in the text and there is some use of technical terminology. His analysis of Scylla and Icarus is very good, there is a clear and convincing argument being followed, and he discusses the different aspects of Scylla's psychology very well. However, there are many ways in which this essay could be improved. The discussion of the use of language or literary techniques within the poem is a bit limited, and the candidate could also include a great deal more quotation from the text itself (in English or Latin, ideally both). There could also be some reference to the influence of Greek epic on the Metamorphoses, for example the use of hexameter, epithets, Greek accusatives etc, as these are Greek myths after all which Ovid is developing. Does he stick to the original stories? Is he being entirely serious? What novel elements does he introduce? Nevertheless, what the candidate has written so far is very good, and examiners will understand that the scope of an answer to an essay question such as this is limited by the time available in the examination. The most important point for improving this essay is covering the minor characters who appear in chapter 8 in more depth.
Response to question
The candidate has responded well to the question, and it is clear that the candidate has a sound knowledge and understanding of chapter eight of the Metamorphoses, and is able to develop his thoughts on the text in quite some detail, skillfully comparing the roles of Scylla and Icarus. However, the question is much more general than that, “To what extent are the characters in Ovid’s Metamorphoses real and not stereotypical?†; when presented with such a question in the examination a candidate should address the roles of all characters in chapter 8, including Minos, Nisus, Ariadne and Daedalus, even if they are only briefly mentioned in the text. Mark schemes for AS level Latin usually specify that the candidate cover the whole of the text, and by not doing so a candidate is risking losing a substantial amount of marks.