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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication here is excellent. The candidate has taken care to ensure clarity in conveyance and written expression, even with specialist vocabulary - which have all been applied and spelt correctly. There is very little else to say here other than to commend the candidate for clearly taking extra measures to ensure their essay is void of errors, aiding optimum understanding to even a non-professional dramatist.
Level of analysis
As analysis is not what the question asks for, I will mark this based on the level of knowledge, detail and accuracy (AO1). This candidate has clearly studied the dramatic intentions of Steven Berkoff's revolutionary mime-based theatre, considering how he aims to break the fourth wall and create a sense of "total theatre" by drawing the audience very close to the action on-stage. The candidate uses a variety of appropriate dramatic terminology accurately and wherever necessary, creating a very clear and precise essay with retains and air of extensive knowledge about Berkoff throughout.
Response to question
This is a very good essay written by a candidate who has clearly conducted external research to find the quotes they use to fortify the answer with evidence. The answer addresses a number of Berkoff's theatrical intentions and presents them clearly with reference to his own work (e.g. 'East') and/or interpretation of other published works (e.g. 'Metamorphosis'). It is a very succinct essay that stays very to the point once the introductory paragraph is out of the way. I might argue that the introductory paragraph is unnecessary but if the candidate can do the above in the allotted exam time then I see no reason they couldn't do so.