Leading off my 2nd paragraph is again another rhetorical question, again to include the reader and make them feel more involved in the text. Within this rhetorical question is the use of the verb “crave” which emphasises the way in which people require attention and beauty developing the idea of obsession, they feel that they need it drastically and by the use of this verb it dramatizes the effect in which it has on the readers thoughts.
A few examples are then added in about television commercials and how they seem to advertise the imagery of “stick thin body” images used to emphasise how unhealthy these girl are, and how these images are also open to all eyes which watch TV on a daily basis. The example of the toothpaste advert constructs a greater idea of sexual connotations and the image of being thin, this is made to help the reader understand that the media sells sex and poor dieting effects to their audience, therefore the reader feels more indulged and sympathetic for teenagers who feel manipulated by these images.
The use of the adjective “impossible” is used later on in the article to explain the way in which beauty is very hard to obtain and judge nowadays. The adjective emphasises a strong image of how incapable things are becoming and help the reader to gain understanding and apprehension towards the article.
Many rhetorical questions are used in this article to build up the drama and tension associated with the events of influential behavior on people’s body images from the mass media. All my lexical choices within the article were picked out deliberately to add in a greater sense of representation of disgusting and vile outcomes all leading down to the media such as the verb phrase “pile on the makeup” the verb pile helps to dramatize the main head word makeup, leading to greater effect and image left in the readers head as they picture doll like teenagers plastering on makeup.
The article is then ended with a imperative sentence “something needs to be done!” this gives a order which shows a fire of emotion and belief in what is being said, it is also the only bit of the article in bold with represents its importance, this helps the reader to accept what is being said as they see it as a very heartbreaking and vulnerable article which helps them understand everything within the text and just how badly it is effecting society today.
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Overall this is a reasonable attempt at the question. It contains some of the key ideas, and some relevant factual material. It could be improved by drawing together its ideas - for example, Lee's model is mentioned but is not then used. At times it concentrates on impacts rather than causes. Some of the terms are defined in a confused way.