Here's what a star student thought of this essay
Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication is excellent. The candidate masterfully uses the complex terminology of Psychology and shows the examiner they are proficient at applying it to their essays. There are very few spelling or grammatical errors and no causes for concern in terms of conveying the intention of the essay.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis is good and is indiciative of a candidate operating at a high B grade. But to achieve the lost marks and pull the grade up to a strong A grade, all the candidate needs to do is concentrate on getting a better analysis of the ECT argument. There are two good strengths and two good weakness provided for the drugs treatment argument, as well as a good level of description about the effectivity of such treatments, but there is only one strength and one weakness for the ECT argument, meaning the discussion is not balanced. Candidates should look to monitor their time better in accordance with the marks available; perhaps try to cut down on some of the description of the drug treatments as there are only 8 marks available for AO1 (knowledge and understanding) and 16 for AO2 (analysis), so logically, less would need to be written for AO1. As it stands, this essay can expect to achieve 6 + 10, making a total of 16 marks out of 24.
Response to question
This is a very strong essay, although there is, as with a lot of questions in this format, a clear bias of time and knowledge towards one of the biological therapies to treating an affective disorder. The drugs treatment argument here is a brilliantly-written discussion, though the ECT argument suggests the candidate may have run out of time as they have not discussed it in quite the same level of detail. This is why time management is so important for long essay questions like this. If time management is not considered then the answer can, as this one does, veer into an unbalanced argument with one superfluously-described therapy and one average one.