Animal Farm - explain how Napoleon gained power over the farm and what the book is about.

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Animal Farm Essay


        In this essay I am going to explain how Napoleon gained power over the farm and what the book is about the name of the book is “Animal Farm” and the author is called “George Orwell”. At the start of the story Farmer Jones was in charge of the animals. Farmer Jones was always drunk and he overworked the animals and he didn’t feed them enough. Old major decided to start a rebellion against Farmer Jones and he got all the other animals involved

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        So the animals all decided to run Farmer Jones out of the farm. They named the battle “The Battle of the Cow-shed” and they then had control of the animals and were organising the working farm and the food. Napoleon keeps interfering with Old Major’s control of the farm and he was pushy, ambitious and he wanted to be a leader. He also was giving them food and trying to get them on his side.

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Napoleon persuades the other animals to obey him by changing the rules for them, and then to suit him-self. He gave them extra food and tells them he would be a better leader. He then gets them on his side.

Napoleon starts to brainwash the animals and uses guard dogs to protect him. He tells them that if they did not do what he said things would go back the way they were when Farmer Jones was in charge of them.

At the start there were seven commandments. Napoleon decided to change the commandments to suit him-self. ...

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The Quality of Written Communication is good, however there is no sufficient evidence that the candidate can form an effective, coherent essay with integrated analysis and knowledge. Elsewhere, the grammar, spelling and punctuation are not too much of an issue, with no large errors that compromise the clarity of the essay present.

The Level of Analysis is good in some parts, but not so good in others. Where the candidate is good, they make a fair reference to parts of the text when considering how napoleons reaches power but even then, the segregated structure and the lack of quote/reference to a specific scene leave the analysis open-ended. For instance, at one point in this essay, the candidate correctly identifies Napoleon' use of his vicious dogs as his henchmen, but fails to link this to how he instills fear into the other animals in order to gain control. All analysis is rendered weaker than it's full potential if it is not linked back to the question.

This is a peculiar response, as few essays are ever required to use sub-headings and two/three-line to segregate the structure and analysis, so naturally, the candidate loses many marks of the "evidence of a natural ability to construct a cohesive essay" part of the mark scheme, but the content of their essay is at least marginally better. There is a good understanding of the question shown in the introduction, but the analysis does not focus explicitly enough on the methods by which Napoleon gains power (control over language; fear arousal in the other animals; Squealer being an excellent public speaker) and instead partially resorts to simply re-telling the events of the novel. Candidates must not re-tell parts fo the novel - the examiners know the novel off by heart and are looking for interesting and illuminating analysis pertaining to the question. No marks are given for pointing out what happens.