The Great Gatsby Sarah Khalil
Word Count: 788
Chapter 7: “ I glanced at Daisy, who was staring…So we drove to the death through the cooling twilight”
Explore how the language used in this passage describes Gatsby’s defeat and its symbolic significance.
In this passage, Daisy is astonished as her husband reveals to the group Gatsby’s past and ways of gaining money. Daisy becomes “terrified” as Tom starts to scandal Gatsby’s way of gaining his money as Daisy stares at Nick and Jordan for reassurance and comforting, however gains none as the two characters seemed both as shocked as she was.
As Gatsby turned to Daisy, trying to deny what Tom has said about him, we realise that he has totally lost control. His dream of marrying Daisy has collapsed, as he is left struggling to defend his name from the accusations made of him. We realise that Tom has won as Daisy starts pleading him ” Please Tom! I can’t stand this anymore.” As though pleading him to rescue her from a mistake she was about to make that would ruin her family life. Fitzgerald writes:
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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication is fair. There shouldn't really be a paragraph break before any quotation though, and it baffles me that so many candidates do this. Quotes really should be included within the body of the answer as it is not standard form to see a quote stuck out on it's own.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis is very good. There is a good range of moment drawn from the text and the candidate shows through their analysis they have not only a good understanding of the extract but also the entire book. One large pivotal piece of analysis (where Daisy and Gatsby leave and are likened to ghosts) sees a slight erroneous detail that compromises the analysis. "[...] there is a link between the end of Gatsby’s dream and the shutting down of human sympathy on him". This quote sounds excellent and would be if they candidate had not confused "the end of Gatsby's dream" with the revelations of his bootlegging career. Both are different and mutually exclusive, so the candidate should be wary of making simple mistakes like this. Other than that, this essay reads very well and is a good example for an answer to this kind of question.
Response to question
This essay concentrates on Gatsby's defeat and the smearing of his name and riches, and what Fitzgerald tells us about him, Daisy, Tom, Nick and Jordan. The candidate responds well to the task, with a number of incidents analysed with well-sourced quotations from the source material. The candidate consistently quotes the question steer and so this creates an explicitly focused link between their answer and the question. It is a good practise to use the words used by the question when referring to analysis, though not in overuse so much that it looks as if you possess no other way of wording what the question is asked. A danger here is that you may give the impression you do not quite understand the question if you cannot describe it in your own words.