Creative Writing: Miss Havisham

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Creative Writing - The day I was broken.

    As I awoke from my interrupted sleep, the sound of rushing and shouting filled my ears. It was of course the day I had been waiting for my whole life, and by the sounds of it, so had everyone else.

    I could hear the maids scuttling around, arranging flowers outside my front door. I could hear the clanging of knives and forks against my brand new oak table.

    My eyes were still closed, I felt as though my dream was finally becoming a delightful reality. Half of me didn’t really want to wake up from my dream of the night before where I dreamt of the moment I walked down the aisle accompanied by my Father. I pictured how beautiful I would look, my snow coloured satin dress, flowing behind me, glistening in time with the flickering of the golden candles. I just can’t wait!

    At long last, I opened my eyes to the elegant room I had slept in. Through my thin white silk curtains, I saw the glowing of thick snow upon the ground outside. The day just keeps getting better! The weather was just as I had hoped, and matching my stunningly elegant outfit. It seemed as though God was on my side today, and nothing could get me down. I felt such a buzz of excitement whilst looking at my wedding dress, delicately draped over my glass mirror, which reflected my gleaming fresh face as I sat up. This day, the 22nd of December was my day to shine and not one person could make me feel differently.

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    My shining, diamond tiara sparkled on the dressing table, as though it was just waiting for me to place it upon my glossy hair. Everything was perfect, just as I imagined, I could smell the sweet scent of lilies and tulips rising to the top floor of my mansion. It surrounded me like a wall of enchantment. It contrasted perfectly with the smell of delicious roast pork and the delectable and sweet aroma of mulled wine. The moment had eventually arrived.

    July 19th, 1809, is another day that will never leave my memory. The day I ...

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This is a good basis for a more engaging piece of descriptive writing. There is some use of figurative language which should be increased and the context of the character and the novel could have been introduced and covered in more depth. 4 Stars