Diary of a geek. Dear Diary, Today was my first day in my new school and I would like to share my experiences with you.

DIARY ENTRY OF A NERD ENTERING A NEW SCHOOL . HIS EXPEIRENCE ON THE FIRST DAY

Dear Diary,

Today was my first day in my new school and I would like to share my experiences with you.

I had hardly slept during the night before, my mind full of excitement and pleasant thoughts about the new school, my heart swollen with pride, and my head floating in clouds. I had long envied boys in the new school – the way they dressed, the way they excelled in examinations, and the facilities they enjoyed for sports and other activities. And now I was about to join them. Looked like my ultimate wish come true!

I thought I should be well dressed on my first day in school. So I wore my favourite polka dots shirt and red pants. To groom myself properly, I used lots of hair oil and wore my new big round spectacles, leaving for school with my pink bag in hand and high ambitions in heart. I was late for school - when I entered the class I saw about 25 students already seated. Taking my first steps into the class I heard a huge outburst of derisive laughter, accompanied by taunts directed by me. I seemed to have appealed to the mean streak in those students, and was the object of their ridicule, with words like “nerd”,” geek” and “loser” being thrown at me. I was astonished at this seemingly strange reaction, which deflated my high spirits. Nevertheless I tried to ignore it and went and sat quietly in one lonely corner of the class.

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The teacher in the class was unable to control this atrocious behaviour. As soon as the teacher left – to my utter surprise - the students bolted the door so that no other teacher could enter! Within a fraction of a second, the students were all over the class. I was taken aback as I had never witnessed this kind of misbehaviour. Rahul, one of the students, sauntered over and sat next to me. He had spiked up hair, his jeans were practically falling down (he almost tripped over them!) and he was continuously chewing gum. He looked quite wicked and evil to me, and his subsequent behaviour proved my assessment to be correct. He told me sarcastically that this was a school and not a fancy dress competition. Evidently he was ridiculing my dress sense. I told him politely and civilly to leave me alone. Instead of agreeing to my innocuous request he picked up a bottle of water, opened it, and emptied its contents on me. I was utterly flabbergasted at his obnoxious behaviour!

Soon enough, the co-ordinator of our class knocked at the door and students had no option but to stop their mischief and open the door. The co-ordinator gave them a long lecture about their noisy behaviour and the locked door of the class-room. The students, including the major culprits, profusely apologized for their misbehaviour (without meaning a single word of it!) so that I do not get an opportunity to complain to the teacher. Two good lectures followed, in which I answered a variety of questions ranging from how to improve the National Economy and the A-Z of complicated trigonometry. My exceptionally sharp answers left the mischievous students gaping in surprise for a while. I thought that the day was getting better, but I was gravely mistaken.

Along with Rahul three other boys - Raj, Mohit and Neil- were determined to make me as miserable as possible. During the lunch break I was quietly eating green salad and boiled vegetables when they decided to tease me out of my wits. Rahul had a piece of paper with a letter – probably “k”- written on it. He passed the paper to Neil and began talking to me as if he was a sweet angel. I did not realize their intentions till I felt something getting pasted on my back, but even then paid little attention to it. After a while Rahul’s intentions became clear when he emptied a packet of ketchup on me. My favourite white colour polka dots shirt had been ruined! Tears started flowing from my eyes just as the ketchup was dripping down my shirt. When I was walking to the washroom to clean my shirt students thought it was a very funny sight and laughed deliriously. Some even went to the extent of kicking me! It was then that I realized that the letter ‘k’ pasted on my shirt was intended to encourage students to ‘kick’ me. I sprinted to the washroom, wiped my tears and cleaned my shirt with water to get ready for the next class.

The next lecture was a class in biology to be taken by our principal Mr. Vinesh Balan: a man in his late fifties with greying hair. His face was dull and just one glance at him was enough to infer that he was a firm and no-nonsense man. He was the kind of person who would severely punish any in-disciplined miscreant. For him discipline was defined as pin drop silence. He walked into the class on the dot at 10:45 - not a minute late or early – and expected the same timeliness from all students. Everyone was seated except one student, who was punished for being late by a few seconds. Ten minutes into the class, he gave us an assignment to complete. I started immediately because I knew transport system by heart. Rahul and Neil were seated behind me, and asked me to help them. After my experience with them I had no desire to do so and refused their request outright. They decided to tech me a lesson for my ‘impudence’. Sir was taking rounds in the class and, when he was not looking at them, they threw a chit on him. The chit contained a couple of abuses and Sir was naturally furious when he read it. He read the chit aloud and shouted in anger,”Who has done this?’’ Almost as a pre-plan, everyone named me. I pleaded innocence but he asked me to come to his office to hand me my expulsion letter. When he left, I again heard the loud, delirious laughter around me. I nearly broke down. Surprise of surprises, it was Rahul who came to my help at that time of crisis. I was shocked! He accompanied me to the Principal’s office where he confessed the truth and his involvement in the incident.

Sir was shocked but was pleasantly surprised at his honesty. He gave him a stern look and a warning but, because of his honest admission, he was allowed to go scot-free. That incident formed the basis of my close friendship with Rahul who thereafter became my protector. So diary as they say : ‘ALL IS WELL THAT ENDS WELL”

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sydneyhopcroft

4th of Mar 2012

Quality of writing

The Quality of Written Communication is very good. The use of more complicated syntax and punctuation is well-adapted to the character and the use of overly-complex language that is spelt correctly in all circumstances, making for a very well-expressed answer.

Level of analysis

The Level of Explanation about a day in the life of a geek is good. The bad thing about diaries and journals is that can become very uninteresting, being only the perspective of one person, and to some extent this answer is hindered by that - there is a lot of emphasis on the narrative but little on the explanation. Nonetheless, the strength of this answer is amplified through the candidate's use of appropriate dialect, even if, at times, it proves quite clunky - that can be attributed to the nature of the geek themselves though.

Response to question

This is a Writing to Explain task, and the candidate assumes the role of a stereotypical geek very well. It is unclear whether the candidate is a girl or a boy though, and this gender classification might have served the candidate in better stead as it would nicely round off the character they assume, creating a good image in the mind of their nerd. There is a consistent characterisation in the candidate's language that suggests they have successfully adopted the character of the stereotypical nerd. An examiner might argue actually, that the stereotyping limits the originality of this piece, so a few other elements and linguistic devices that carve a more innovative character may have improved this answer, as it shows the candidate can think "outside the box", as it were, drawing on a number of interesting techniques to create the character.

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