How do the poets of ‘Half-Caste’ and ‘Not my Business’ talk about discrimination?
Our thoughts are unseen hands shaping the people we meet. Whatever we truly think them to be, that's what they'll become in our eyes. Discrimination is the locks on the door to wisdom, two poems which enlighten us about the issues of discrimination are, ‘Half-Caste’ and ‘Not my Business’.
Agard states that those who discriminate others because of who they are, will only receive half or no respect at all, “I’m sure you’ll understand, why I offer yu half-a-hand”. This line reveals Agard’s frustration as he refuses to respect those who have stereotypes; he aims to put across to the reader that any kind of discrimination is wrong. In the same way, Osundare protests against complacency. In this poem the narrator witnesses three catastrophic events based on discrimination in which he does not choose to act upon, “So long they don’t take the yam from my savouring mouth”. The poet aims to get across a fable with a deep moral in it. The background of this poem is based on the violence used by the state authorities against the people of Nigeria.
The intention of Agard is to challenge and confront those who racially discriminate others and us as unconventional humans, “explain yu self wha yu mean” this line depicts Agard’s frustration towards racism and demands answers- leaving the reader guilt felt in order to make them empathise. On the other hand, Osundare creates a picture in the reader’s mind of what is on-looked by the narrator who is only concerned about his own survival, “So long they don’t take the yam from my savouring mouth”. The poet’s objective is to warn the reader about morality and prioritising others before ourselves. He writes about the injustice going on in the world, stating it is our responsibility to be confident and stop it so that we can survive.
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This is a fantastic example of a high quality essay, it is fluent, the candidate has used a good range of vocabulary and there are no issues with spelling or grammar.
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The candidate chooses suitable quotations and goes into a sufficient level of analysis to back up their ideas. S/he manages to talk about the poets feelings and the moral within ‘Not my business’ which is that you shouldn’t ignore abuse because one day it might happen to you too. We should stand up and fight against oppressive regimes. The candidate has also clearly understood the attitude of John Agard’s poem ‘half-caste’ and how he is mocking those that discriminate against others. In addition the candidate appropriately discusses linguistic terms such as the use of metaphors, which is expected form an A grade student. My only qualm would be that the conclusion could be stronger, I would like to see the candidates personal opinions coming though as well as a summary of their key points and ideas.
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This is an exceptional piece of work, it goes into a suitable depth and is engaging. The candidate clearly answers the set question and does so with flair. S/he goes into a suitable depth and the essay is interesting to read. I do feel that this would flow better if the candidate changed the layout so that they discussed all the points from one poem followed by all the points of the next, jumping between to two can make the essay hard to follow.