My most unforgettable Trip occurred about 3 years ago during the summer vacation, when I and my sister were embarking on our journey to Spain due to relocation.

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My Unforgettable Trip

My Unforgettable Trip

My most unforgettable Trip occurred about 3 years ago during the summer vacation, when I and my sister were embarking on our journey to Spain due to relocation. The day of the trip I laid in bed thinking about the friends of mine whom I was going to leave behind. Thoughts kept coming in.

A night before we planned the journey from a city in Nigeria to the capital to catch the plane the next day. We didn’t book to take a van. So thought of waking earlier to get to the station were they hire cars and taxis for travelling because we could drive down due to the far distance.

So the day came when we had to travel and got to the station as planned. When we arrived at the hire station we seemed to have some problems with our luggage because they were too much for a car our taxi so we had to book for a van to be able to take our luggage.  We waited for a long period of time to find the perfect car that would fit our luggage but they seemed to too small or parked up.

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My aunty who was going to accompanied me and my sister to the airport got so angry because she tend to get very hot tempered because we didn’t have a very long period of time to waste before our plane could take off because the journey from were we where to the airport was about 3 hours long. And we had to be their before 7pm. It was about 12pm we hungry so we went for food everyone looking frustrated at the time hoping we leave soon. We where about to leave to another hire company when they assigned ...

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This is an exciting and powerful story. There are many errors eg where/were and their/there and the occasional use of the wrong word. However the writer does include figurative language such as a simile and onomatopoeia in order to tell the story effectively. Many errors are consistent with those made by writers when English is not their first language. ** 2 stars.