Short story on The Charge of the Light Brigade poem

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Short story on “The Charge of the Light Brigade” poem

What Miss Willby wants?

  • Lots of description (that fits in with the mood)
  • Colour of the land scape
  • Characters feelings
  • Time
  • Description /Feelings
  • Small Dialogue
  • Sense of contrast (light/ dark, sound/ silence, black/ white)

“Oh my God, what was I doing?” It was the day before the daunting campaign; the grey storm clouds cast a dark shadow over our heads as we took shelter in the tents. I was sharing a tent with my friend James. I have known him for 5 years now and I had never seen such fear on his face as I saw then.

My name is Sam Jones; I was one of six hundred men who were camping out a league away from “Death Valley”. We had been told by our senior officer to take a Russian gun’s outpost half a league down the valley. I had had a good job back home; I had a wife and kid. I will never forget the look on Tim’s face when he said goodbye. This is what I was fighting for; I was fighting for my life, I was fighting for them.

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…I remember the first time I met James, we were working together on the construction site, it was his first day and I was the one to “show him the ropes”. At first I was uncertain of his character, but I grew to like him and we soon became the best of friends.

I can recall one particular day at the construction site. We were up on some scaffolding, on the second floor, when James and I saw an abandoned newspaper on the floor below. In big bold letters we caught the front page “WE ARE AT WAR!” ...

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This is an effective attempt to use the events of the poem to construct a narrative about one fictional trooper and his experience of the cavalry charge. The essay writer successfully creates a credible character and describes the events from his point of view, with his emotional responses. The essay is a little short to do justice to the task; more could be made of the traumatic experience of the charge, in particular. Paragraph construction is well managed and sentence construction is mostly well controlled, slightly marred by a few errors of punctuation and tense. 4 stars