Supermarket Description - Sleek, automatic, glass doors slid smoothly open, only to divulge a cacophony of noise.

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        Sleek, automatic, glass doors slid smoothly open, only to divulge a cacophony of noise. Children wailed. Tills beeped. Sound system boomed. Floor polishers whirred. In comparison, the rumbling cars and chattering birds of the outside world were nothing. Accompanying the noise flamboyant red signs stood tall and proud, enticing innocent shoppers towards them with sweet words and tempting promises. Aisles braced themselves against the pulsating throng of vibrant colours. Customers pushed and shoved as they tried to squeeze past one another trying to gain access to the many bargains. The sun’s scorching golden rays outside would have been sorely tempting to many if not for the cool breeze of the air conditioner oozing through the gaps between each customer.

CRASH!

Each trolley collision resonated like a thousand crashing cymbals.

Shelf stackers dissolved into the chaos. A boa constrictor’s victim, trapped in the reptile’s stomach, would have had more room to breathe than here; it truly was as busy as a hive full of bees rushing to make honeycombs for their queen.

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 All the while, the bakery and rotisserie battled it out with each other to grab customers; they reached out in smoky tendrils of alluring aromas. Freshly baked bread, hot and crisp, mesmerised countless... but who could resist the delectable taste of honey roast chicken, tender and succulent?

Elsewhere, employees scurried around about like squirrels readying themselves for winter – customers’ every need were tended to with the standard impassive, teeth baring smile.

           Deep within the supermarket, a small child dragged his feet along the polished marble as he was pulled along; shiny, smart trainers screeched piercingly against the ...

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***** An excellent piece of descriptive writing which shows a wide vocabulary, effective use of onomatopoeia, figurative language including original similes and a skilful use of varied syntax. The senses are effectively used to create images in the mind of the reader. This is a very well written piece of description and the writer remains in control throughout the essay. Excellent.