The Snow Globe

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Claire MacGarvie

The Snow Globe

 “Myra Catherine” My Mother Shouted Don’t you just hate it when they use your middle name. I stormed up the stairs and slammed the door behind me I could hear the angry foot steps of my mother running back down the creaky stairs. I threw myself on my cold bed as I saw the blurry snow globe on my bedside table; I wiped my tears and looked again. If only I could live there I thought to myself no mother, no school just me and no one can get in.

Whilst staring at the happy faces in the snow globe my eyes began to get heavy, it was a struggle to keep them open I gave up and dozed in to a deep sleep.

As I awoke I felt a gentle pitter patter on my cheek I thought I was my ceiling leaking again, I slowly opened my eyes and couldn’t believe what I saw I quickly shut them again I first opened my left eye and I was still there, I opened my right eye and thought I must be dreaming.  

This Place Where ever I was the most beautiful wonderful place I had ever been. There was snow, snow as far as the eye could see tall winding trees with the sun beaming on them making the snow glisten and over the big hill there were little huts and a village, there were little footprints in the snow and everything covered in a beautiful white blanket it was stunning, I was so amazed and astounded I didn’t even think about the coldness.

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I Stood Up and looked around I recognised the place it was like I had been here before or dreamt of it, after a couple minutes of trying to work out where I was it hit me. The snow Globe on my bedside table, but that’s impossible I thought.

I heard a noise something moving behind me, I quickly turned but there was nothing there I could here some shuffling in the snow “hello” I shouted, “is anybody there?” But there was no answer. Someone came out slowly and jumpy from behind the tree it walked towards me ...

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The concept of this story is fine; however the style of writing is too simplistic and needs to be developed into a more mature style of writing. Plan your creative writing carefully so there is a real direction to your work and a strong link between the start and the end of the piece. 3 Stars