Moreover, I have also used a rule of 3 which is also present in my style model. An example of this is:”suicide bombings, honour killings and kidnapping”. I have used this technique to emphasize skilfully my point and it is commonly used as a persuasive device. Furthermore, this phrase is also alliterative so it is more likely to linger on in the reader’s mind. This tripling also helps to fulfil my purpose as my article is successful in raising awareness of the dangers in Pakistan.
Next I have used parenthesis for various uses. Similarly to my style model, I employed parenthesis such as: “(the so called “premier airline” of Pakistan because there is only one)”Like my style model, I have used this technique subtly to add a chatty aside - therefore to make the journal more colloquial so I can have a broader audience and contribute efficiently to mixed register (mode). Another example of when I have used parenthesis is:”25 rupees (30p)”.In this context, I have included this so additional useful information such as currency is explained to a foreign population who are alien to rupees.
In addition, I have used figurative language such as similes and metaphors. I have used the similie ”Crammed like sardines” to make a comparison the reader can relate to and to create a vivid sense of sensory images so the reader can too experience this journey which is characteristic of travel journals. In addition, the metaphor “Gasoline monster of the calm air” is effective as it makes comparisons to create a strong visual image. Another aspect of using metaphor is that it subtly makes the text more entertaining which helps fulfil my secondary purpose. I have used the oxymoron “sweltering rain” to add interest, creativity and depth to my piece.
I have used negative adjectives such as ”unattractive” and “daunting” to subtly connote negative lexical connotations of Pakistan so they are more likely not to visit Pakistan- by emphasizing the dysfunctional society of Pakistan. This fulfils the criteria of the purpose to inform people not to visit Pakistan.
I have used a variety of sentence construction to make the text more interesting and lively which is similar to my style model. I have used the minor elliptical sentence”Takeoff was looming...” is used to add emphasis and a build up of cohesion to the next paragraph and excitement in the form of suspense. I have added the simple sentences from my drafting process “I waited. Waited.” to connote a sense of tension and eeriness. I have used complex sentences such as: “ I sympathized with his impoverished state and paid him a chunky commission of 25 rupees (30p) which he graciously accepted, expressing his gratitude at my deed by offering countless “Mehrbani’s” and excessive prayers”. I have employed numerous complex sentences to make the piece more piece more interesting for the reader and more importantly to fullfill the purpose of making the text more persuasive.