The very good word in this is ‘helpless’this gives the effects that the men felt lonely and their painful memories and thoughts. Owen also uses the perfect adjectives and phrases to describe the horror.‘ haunting’ and
‘Devils sick of sin’
Are excellent examples, haunting is good because heis talking about the bombs and war going on behind, how they haunt you in your dreams and wherever you go how you can not forget them. With ‘devils sick of sin’
Owen is saying even the devil would think what he has seen and heard is disgusting, sickening and evil, this is also alliteration when the same word and sound is used. With these (description words) comes onomatoepia ‘hoots’ ‘gargling’ and ‘coughing’, hoots is describing the sounds of the shells dropping how the menblanked them out in their tiredness. Gargling is a good word as Owen uses it for the man when he is suffering from the gas attack and his lungs have flooded with blood from the effects of the gas. Wilfred Owen uses enjambment a lot in this poem
‘Many had lost their boots
But limped on’
This effect helps move the poem on smoothly it also makes you the reader want to go on and read the next line.
The imagery Wilfred Owen uses just makes you feel as though you are there, how much you would want to stop the terrible fighting also how annoyed he must of felt when he found out people thought he was a coward. At that time not many people could read, letalone read Latin. The political leaders could but they wanted the people of Britain to believe everything was fine and the war would be over soon, they didn’t tell them about the suffering and conditions in the trenches.
Describing these conditions Owen couldn’t find powerful enough words in the English language so he made some up
This means the mens feet were covered in blood. As many men lost their boots and weren’t issued new ones so they would walk around bare foot, getting cut and some times losing toes on bits of barbed wire, shell and glass this would cover their feet in blood.
There is a very strong link between the first line and the last few lines
‘Dulce et decorum est’
Which means it is sweet and fitting this makes you think what is? And makes you read the poem, then at the end of the poem it repeats it but with an extra bit ‘pro patria Mori’ (to die for your country) and before this he also says ‘the old lie’ I don’t think that this bit (the old lie) needs to be in the poem because you already think this.
I think Wilfred Owen has succeeded in getting the message across to the reader in the last 60-80 years when more and more people learnt to read. They realised the real effects of the war and how many people died and suffered. He taught not to fall into the trap of believing war is graceful. In 1916-18 people didn’t realise this and thought everything was fine and dandy.
The effect the poem has on me is quite deep and I think how awful it must have been families when they found out daddy wasn’t coming back at Christmas or if ever at all.
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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication is also very poor. he candidate can string together a simple sentence, but anything longer or more complex results in either a misuse of punctuation (comma splice, missing punctuation) or a loss of clarity. This needs to be carefully reconsidered and the candidate appears to have limited knowledge of how to write cohesively and coherently. This must be addressed by the teacher on an individual basis and they must guide the candidate to improve their writing. What the candidate can do, is to re-read every line they write to ensure maximum clarity and accuracy in their written English.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis is really quite poor. For a GCSE there is almost none and this candidate can expect a solid D grade for their efforts. From their choice of words for analysis ("fall into the trap of believing war is graceful") to their basic understanding of what the poem is saying ("The poem is written from the point of view of an eyewitness who was there before during and after the attack" (sic).), this candidate does not show ability of a cohesive writer. Taking the aforementioned quote: war was never branded as "graceful", even in propaganda, or else it wouldn't be seen as a brave and manly thing to do and would appear to be something women could participate in. This fundamental misunderstanding about the poem naturally hinders the rest of the analysis, and where the little accurate analysis does peep through, it is merely feature-spotting, which limits this essay to it's D grade. To improve, candidates must not look through the poem and find something worthy of commentary, simply identify it and then move on. They need to analyse the effect on the reader. The rhyme scheme of 'Dulce et Decorum est' is indeed ABABCDCDEFEF, but what about the structure? The stanza breaks? What changes and why is the third stanza only two lines long? This is the level of analysis that the candidate needs to consider if they are to break in to the C grade boundary.
Response to question
This is an analytical response to Wilfred Owen's poem, 'Dulce et Decorum est'. The candidate's response show signs of not being able to clearly present ideas about the poem, and quite substantial lack of appreciation of the gravity of war poetry; the writing on most occasions does not appears explicitly objective and analytical and phrases like "I did not notice this [the poem's rhyme scheme] at first. This is good poetry" and "In 1916-18 people didn't realise this [the reality of war] and thought everything was fine and dandy" is not only bad analysis, but the use of the phrase "fine and dandy" is a colloquialism and therefore not part of Standard English. As a GCSE English student, this should be greatly discouraged. I would advise that the candidate steer away from any phrases mentioning themselves, as whilst analysis allows much room for personal interpretation, it is best not to mention yourself when writing analysis because it puts holes for critics to argue with if you say "I think..." or "This appears to me as...". You should be confident and precise in your language choices and should write everything adamantly, saying something IS representative of this or that, and that something IS and COULD BE a deliberate link to something else.