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Quality of writing
The report uses terms such as 'obliterated', whilst I agree with what the student is proposing this doesn't add anything to the report. If this is their opinion, there should explain how this could be achieved by using regulation to prevent these types of websites to exist. If the report mentions how clear regulation, would enable the government to remove these types of websites, this would show the examiner that the student understands how the government may force law regrading the internet.
Level of analysis
The report contains a large number of the student's own opinion, this is fine along as the student has explained what is meant by this and justify their opinions by some background knowledge. If these opinions aren't backed-up with any real information, then this isn't showing a good understanding, as this is only their opinion and this isn't what the report should contain. For example, the report could state 'The government currently isn't undertaking the necessary steps to resolve the increasing amount of 'TROLLS' on the internet, and in order to prevent this rise there could extend the law from a maximum of 6 months in prison to 10 years in prison to reflect the damaged done to a number of victim's which have been expressed in a number of different media stories'. The above, clearly states an opinion, and uses background understanding of the regulation by explaining how there serve a maximum of 6 months in prison, which will show in-depth understanding. The report could also mention the actual number of cases of internet 'TROLLS' and the number of how many people have faced jail terms for this offence.
Response to question
In summary, the report is a little scatted as this isn't written in a logical way. The student has talked about their opinion and these points will need to be supported by background understanding of the subject. The opening paragraph isn't an appropriate introduction to the report. The report should give a brief knowledge of what is regulation, and how this will impact on the internet. Currently the student has talked about a number of websites, which are 'harmful', however this shouldn't be used in the opening paragraph.