"Is behavior mainly inherited or it is learned?" Discuss based on your knowledge concerning modern Psychological theories.
The answer to this question is based on the debate of nature and nurture. Nature represents the idea that behavior is inherited while the psychologists who support nature are known as nativists. Hence, nurture is that behavior is learned and those who believe in nurture are known as the empiricists.
The nativists position is that a person is born with an inherited "blue print", meaning an inherited disposition such as DNA. And afterwards his behavior will be developed through the process of maturation. So, the environment doesn't affect behavior only when there are methods employed in order to change an individual's nature (e.g.: gene therapy or brain surgery).
The empiricists position states that a baby's mind at birth is like a blank page, known as tabula rasa and there are recorded all future experiences from which the baby learns how to behave. Therefore environment has a direct effect on an individuals behavior.
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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication (QWC) is fair, although some baffling writing choices have been made. I don't know why the candidate felt the need to capitalise all the letter of Id, Ego and Superego, when in fact I don't think any are required at all. Candidates are reminded of the need for good grammar and English when writing long Psychology essays. In a subject with such a complex array of terms and language it is important candidates retain a good QWC, because it the quality lapses and the examiner cannot read it, or if simply silly decisions like the above have been made (i.e. the mistake is not accidental) then they will not achieve what can be considered the easiest marks to get in the entire exam.
Level of analysis
The Level of Analysis here is very good, but there are a few things missing/things to be corrected. Where the answer is good is the candidate's use of an integrated response, drawing on a number of other debates that link to the Nature vs. Nurture debate; they also succeed in giving a balanced argument with plenty of empirical evidence in the form of psychological research (Freud, Freudian theory, Lorenz, etc.). The argument utilises plenty of Psychology-specific language, which indicates to the examiner that there is a confident candidate behind the essay; one who is comfortable and competent enough to discuss psychology using the terms and vocabulary experts use. Some areas need improvements, such as in the exemplary paragraph on the attribution of aggression, where the candidate provides Freud and Lorenz in support of the Nature debate and no study or evidence for the Nurture debate. The candidate could use the study by Bandura, Ross & Ross into the transmission of aggression and Social Learning Theory here. Also, I would be very, very wary about using Freud as evidence for only the Nature debate when actually, his theories could be concluded to be Interactionist (supporting both Nature and Nurture). The Psychodynamic perspective famously attributes a lot of behaviour to childhood experiences and not neuro-psychological shifts as the Id, Ego and Superego are constituents of the 'mind' and not necessarily the actual physical brain (of course there are parts of his theory that do concern the physical brain) so be wary of the more picky exam boards who will want something more in-line with stringent support of Nature only, like Brunner's study into gene deficiency as a reason for crime, or Raine's PET scans of serial murderers.
Response to question
The above essay is well-written and indicates the candidate is wholly capable of discussing, to a good analytical depth, the Nature vs. Nurture debate as well as implicitly referring to Individual vs. Situational Attribution. This integration really fortifies the answer and makes it stand out amongst others (something candidates should value, as the examiners will be marking hundreds of similar essay and small things like this make it a more interesting read). The candidate takes their time with an effective introductory paragraph, outlining the Nature vs. Nurture debate and informing readers of some of the language which is used in psychology too. All in all a very sound response to the question.