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Empathetic writing based on “Your Move”

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Centre name: Quintin Kynaston Centre number: 10257 Candidate name: Sahytmyrat Tachev Empathetic writing based on "Your Move" Original Writing. Dear Mum, This is so upsetting, I don't know what to say. Why didn't you tell me this stuff before? You don't know how furious I'm. Why are you accusing me of everything with only pity for yourself? Was it my mistake you slept with a married man? I am in jail mum, in jail. I'm a thief mum. I stole something, not because I enjoy it but because I needed to feed myself, support myself, which you couldn't do, mum. This is not the first time I was caught. The first time I was caught was when I was eight but they would just let me go because what ever they did they couldn't get in touch with you. I guess there is a part of me to blame for the reason I'm in jail. You said you worked hard for me but you never showed any love and cared for me. ...read more.


I know you worked all day, it must've been hard for you. I don't know much about raising a child but I know leaving a child in a dark room for ten hours is not a good way to raise a child. That room, I hated that room. The only thing that was pleasant in that room was the crusty smell from the bakers below. I still hated it because the noise below annoyed me all day long. The heat from the bakers was so hot it felt like the house was on fire, I couldn't sit on one place more than ten minutes. When the sun falls down and the shop closes, it would be so quite I could hear spiders crawling and so dark my eyes would dilate more than the cow's eye. I tried to get used to that room, but as more as I got used to it I hated it more. It's hard to get used to a place where you can hear mice crawling under your bed when you're sleeping at night. ...read more.


You didn't care anything about me. Thinking all about this reminded me that I never had proper childhood. I hated school there was no point in me learning anything. There wasn't any chance of me getting into college, you didn't have the money. I wasn't academic at all, I guess you knew that. Just because I didn't have a farther even the teachers ignored me. If something bad happened I was their number one suspect. By now you must've realised I don't love you much. I will not come to visit you after I serve my time. Remember mum, there is love in me for you but I guess it's not enough. You're right, it's my move now. I'll choose it wisely. I wouldn't want the same for my children. Here they say the maximum I'll get will be three years. After that I'll do every thing for the best. But whatever I do I can't change one thing. I'm a bastard mum, I was born as one. I guess it's not just my life that got ruined. But the things you said in the letter is just too much. By mum, I don't think I'll be seeing you again. Yours sincerely, Philip. ?? ?? ?? ?? ...read more.

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