Mitul Gupta – 11K
The Shawshank redemption film review:
Although the film is largely narrated by Morgan Freeman playing the role of Red, the central character is Tim Robbins who plays the role of Andy Dufresne. His character has quite a lamentable story of an ex-banker who is accused of murdering his wife and her partner for adultery. Tim Robbins make the most of this role and maximises the personality of the character because he showed the right amount of physical cowardice when confronted by strangers and even worse the sisters; however he showed the corporate and clinical attitude that had made him a successful banker. This is displayed when he tries to grab what he cannot reach by making a deal with Captain Hadley about his late brother’s money. One of the most brilliant things about this character is that he doesn’t break sweat even when the captain has him dangling from the edge of the factory ceiling because he thinks that you need to either, “get busy living or get busy dying”.
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Quality of writing
The Quality of Written Communication is fine. The candidate's grammar and clumsy syntax structure well prevent them from reaching the highest band of marks but at no point does their opinions on the film appear ambiguous.
Level of analysis
Writing in the form of a review requires much appreciation of the writing standards expected, and this candidate has adhered well to the genre convention of this style of writing. The candidate refers to characters by the actor's surname and quotes appropriately from the film to back up their opinions. Being a personal response, candidates run the risk of simply re-iterating the film's plot, ruining the surprise for the audience, so the sensitive handling of events mean the candidate has done well to provide personal insight to the film and elaborated using quotes to prove that they know what they're talking about, rather than just drawing assumptions and expecting people who might not have seen the film to understand what they're trying to say. Perhaps this candidate - and other future candidates - will note, as in every form of writing, not to repeat themselves e.g. - "well produced, well scripted and well presented [...] well rounded". The first three are acceptable as a Rule of Three, but further adjectives should be used from thereon to show an adeptness with language and a wide knowledge of vocabulary.
Response to question
This task to inform and analyse the effectiveness of the film 'The Shawshank Redemption' asks the candidate to provide a personal response to the film and inform others how good they think it is. The review is engaging and addresses the readers, as should all good reviews, so there is a clear Response to the Question and a recognition of what is required in order to achieve a good answer.