The causes of the Russian revolution of 1905 can be divided into three areas: Long term causes, short term causes and immediate causes.
The problems that caused the revolution began years before it actually happened. Many of the national groups that lived within Russia resented the government's policy of 'Russification' as they saw it was trying to attack their way of life. Most children were forced to learn Russian in school and many Russian officials were chosen to fill non-Russian positions in local government. Most of the traditional customs were banned and the people had to obey Russian customs.
The peasants also had been caused much suffering by the government. They had been released from Serfdom in 1861 and had been allocated land with which to farm and earn money. They could get loans from the government. However most of the peasants had to pay these loans off over a long period of time. As a result most of the peasants got into heavy debt. This was made worse by the fact that after 1861 the landowners had large estates. Many of the peasants were forced to work on the estates of nobles so they could earn extra money.
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The grammar and spelling in this essay was in general good, however there were a few spelling errors, which to be fair could be seen as typos. If this was the case then, re-reading your essay before handing it in is most advisable, as you avoid these silly errors. It is important to note that this author uses good vocabulary, which did help improve the overall standard of this essay. I feel it is worth three stars, would have been four if there had been a conclusion/analysis.
Level of analysis
There is a distinct lack of analysis in this answer, however the question does not ask for it, so is unlikely to get marked down. That said, if you can put any analysis in it, it should raise your grade, as it shows understanding as well as regurgitation. The essay lacked a conclusion, which is detrimental to the grade as any conclusion (can be a sentence just summing up the causes and perhaps saying one causes was more important than another) helps round the essay off.
Response to question
This essay stays strictly to the question. The introduction sets out an immediate plan of the essay, which for an examiner is very useful to know, however f there had been an argument/line they would have received a better mark. Although the question does explicitly ask for it, an answer which weighted the causes is likely to have received better marks, as it shows that not only can give a narrative but that you can also evaluate the importance of each cause. The author should have got a fair mark, as he clearly had good knowledge. Kudos, for the quote about the Russo-Japanese War, as quotes allow you to show off your knowledge.