In this part of the assignment I will be comparing two organizations (ASDA and Post Office), then I will be describing each businesses aims, objectives and mission statement.
Serkan Colak COL08073163 BTEC 1st Diploma Business
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Introduction:
In this part of the assignment I will be comparing two organizations (ASDA and Post Office), then I will be describing each businesses aims, objectives and mission statement. Furthermore I will be concluding this part of the assignment
Similarities and Differences between ASDA and Post Office
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Quality of writing
The report states a phrase twice. As under the title 'Aim's For ASDA' it states 'ASDA aims are to'. Similar, with 'Objectives For ASDA', it states 'ASDA aims are to' This is a clear copy and paste issue, and this should be changed within the report.
Level of analysis
The student does make an evaluation, however there have included information which is false which shows the examiner that the student has a poor understanding of the two businesses. Their view on why Royal Mail is more important is quite vague. The report could state 'The Royal Mail is more important to consumers, as there is a lack of competition within the market. If Royal Mail didn't exist, it would be quite difficult for a number of consumers to send letters/packages to different locations for a reasonable cost. However with regards to ASDA, if ASDA weren't to exist, this would be fine. There would be one less competitor within the market, although there are a number of other large business within the food industry, such as Sainburys, M&S, Waitrose and a number of others. Thus, the Royal Mail is an increased importance to consumers'.
Response to question
The report is quite vague. The report does state a few differences which are accurate and gives their mission statements, aims and objectives. However the report does lack in-depth understanding and the student doesn't evaluate effectively. The table of similarities is in-correct in some parts. The Royal Mail currently doesn't make any profit. The Royal Mail doesn't offer any type of franchisee, as you cannot open a Post Office anywhere. In addition, the student would be able to add more detail to the statements made within the table to acquire high marks.